As a babe, tender bud of leaf appears,
my spirit delights at the sight of you.
To my ears floats sweet song of early morn,
voiced by dear little wing'd ones bathed in dew.
Sweet song of bird 'neath ceylon sapphire sky,
cock robin sounds for a true love to bring.
Such longing doth set a tear to my eye,
his little heart bursts with the joy of spring.
Jonquils rise, bid farewell cold Winter King,
as he gives his throne to the Queen of May
He tiptoes out with chill yet lingering
with grace she curtsies as he goes his way
Adieu, Winter King! Warm kiss doth she blow.
Though loved, King must leaveth when Queen doth show.
A contest entry
- *May Seduction and Smiles for "Yours Truly" *UPDATE by cherche -d -ame.
5250 points, ended May 29, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - English Sonnets- Prompt: Nature by mborda.
650 points, ended July 13, 2007, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME! (now 12,000) - Part 3 Nature by cricketjeff.
1000 points, ended December 17, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Many thanks for your entry in our 'Nature' contest.We had a mammoth task choosing the winners, we're sorry you were not chosen this time.
Please join us in the remaining contests in our Rhyming Extravaganza.
Sue and Jeff, your contest hosts.
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A sonnet writer you are indeed
for this is what I needed to read
your imagery outstanding my dear
for you brought to me this time of year
Thank you for such visual delight
you have penned quite a beautiful sight
easy to see why this took the gold
for I am a believer you have sold!
Great penning!
Frogz~
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This has amazing imagery I still have yet to figure the sonnet form out but it seems you have done it well Congrats on the gold and hm Good luck in this contest
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Wow! A good poem!
Great Sonnet! Fantastic flow and rhyme! (Oh, and I loved the Robin! It brought a smile to my face!)
One of my favorites!
Monique
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an absolutely stunning sonnet. I loved the visual of the Queen of May kissing Winter goodbye in parting. It has a very romantic tone to it and definitely sets the mood for May. Thank you for entering and best wishes in the ontest,
reenie
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Thank you so much, for you lovey comments and thank you for the HM, very sweet of you.
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I love sonnets and this is no exception. Great write but I do have one suggestion.
In the line 'voiced by dear little winged ones bathed in dew' the word 'winged' could be read by some anally retentive people as 'win-ged' so it might be better to write it as 'wing'd'.
Or maybe I am talking out of my retentive arse
You did a great job with the flow and the rhyming scheme and kept the metre perfect.
Have the clap
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Another Fantastic Write
You do an excellent job on this type of write!! Such imagery and flow! Seasons emotions all through it set the stage for a super show. Well done from start to finish my friend, Don
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I have been impressed too, this poem is so capturing to the reader, you breathe new life to sonnets while maintaining their timeless feel
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Nice tribute. Beautifully penned. I am not a huge fan of sonnets but I didn't even notice pass the title.
Well done!!!
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I've been
very impressed with your sonnets... very well done
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simply lovely,a beautiful poem written with thought ,best wishes
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Here hear, sweet sonetteer,
All hail the bard of Carolina
words well written, none are fina
She speaketh of spring, writely so
If joy ye seek to her page go.
Very well written. Now I don't know if I want to be vampiric or frolic in the spring.
Buddy
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