Standing back, I see my life crossing that line
of eternal life and eternal rest and eternal happiness
lost and gone
"Wait for me?"
and my soul is left behind.
Here the demons claim me
using me as they wish
[jaded]
taunting me because when I said
"Wait for me?"
my soul was left behind.
Now all my innocence is gone,
and I just can't believe how life could be this cruel
how MY life could betray me...
"Wait for me?"
Left behind.
Author notes
"I send out a prayer for those left behind"
A contest entry
- For Those Left Behind by Ink4Blood.
600 points, ended June 18, 2007, 21 entries
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Comments
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This poem is good because: it sort of flows along not chunkey like other poems but smooth. My first impression was: I think this is a really good prayer to those left behind. this is a Really good poem.
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Well done Daughter
You have penned a very moving if somewhat sad poem, it flows so well and with such great rthym, Great Job, Love Dad
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Thank you so much!
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You write for contests alot.
Do you ever write for fun cassie lmao.
Well yea really GOOD write :]
matt
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Yesh.
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What a sad read! you did a great job on it. Best of luck in the contest!
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Thank you for your comment!
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This has such a sad image. With good flow and definition this is a great read to a sad image.
Love,
Amera
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Thank you! It always makes me happy to see your comments!
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