The cats enjoy a roundabout meal
While the dogs like it on the spot
They both like another tiresome act
Oh how difficult is it to unlock
The love’s lock
Tell me do you like on the spot
Or round about
The bull said to the cow
It’s all round about you know
Was the obvious answer
My motion is always forward
You know when I eat
Stupid you do every thing on the spot
( I know you like all three on the spot)
And look at me how I go round about
Doing it as if unconcerned
While the whole world watches around
Please tell me what you think
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I am a bit confused with this kind of poetry but in my opinion if you are satisfied then your poetic challenge is fulfilled. Who said that everybody must like every bodies poetry? Maybe the point is the last line in this poem. World is mostly - just watching. Anyhow, my applause for your poetic expression.
~Sonja~
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There is some point there.
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Hmmm...
Well, you have yourself a mix of the vague and whimsical. I think I liked it over all, even if I'm not quite sure what it's all about. Maybe that's the point.
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Critically critical, thats the way. Thank you.
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On the spot with this comment, leaves me round about
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Hi a phrase we use in Italy is, it is neither fish or meat, it left me unsatisfied and a little bored, sorry to be harsh but it did nothing for me,
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Truly critical! Thank you.
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a strange poem about animals grazing and pets eating,it conjours up some strange images, but it is an interesting view on animals,best wishes
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