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Her Thoughts

I never felt such mental pull from anyone
Whether its day or night, morning or evening
I find myself talking to her in my mind
Like an electron revolving around the nucleus

Explaining my loneliness, my faults, my desires
Telling how she has brought changes in my life
Expressing my fears if she goes out of my life
Like electron, jumping on different orbits

I want to concentrate on my other works
My mind acts like a slave of her thoughts
Mental efforts turn fruitless to escape her slavery
Loosing peace like an electron’s energy after it jumps

After so many days of my efforts to woo her
Her emotions for me remain constant like a nucleus
Her heart hasn’t betrayed her, like a proton in nucleus
She reins her mind as nucleus controls its neutrons.

Will my thoughts too hover her like electron clouds?
Are my distractions symptoms of one-sided love?
When will force of repulsion act on my mind?
Will my love end like “the decay of an atom”?

Author notes

How difficult it is to distract our thoughts from our beloved.

Please tell me whether nucleus, electrons etc were good comparision?

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  • Swan song gold member
    May 13, 2007

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    The first four lines gets my attention very well I have done this before in the second stanza I can relate
    This is well written and thought out