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Where I Belong

Missing image

                                Original Artwork by Renelle Sommerville
                                                         Media:  Pastel



Oh glor’ous light that ends my day,

Caressing as I stand and pray,

And draws me to this dawning year,

While beckoning from far away.

On this day’s morn I stood right here

And dreamed my dreams as light drew near,

Exactly as I’ve always done,

Filled up with hope . . . ‘midst all my fear.

A picture of the rising sun,

As all my birthdays have begun.

Another one at evensong,

Approaching dark’s oblivion.

But somehow life has gone so wrong.

If only I were wise and strong,

And could go back where I belong,

And could go back where I belong.

Author notes

One more collaboration with Reni's art. She told me a little story that goes with this one.

Her birthday was just a few days ago and she has a tradition of getting up early and taking a photo of the sunrise and then taking another of the sunset. She was thinking of that when she created this beauty.

She's originally from England and dreams of some day going back there.

Thanks again, Reni, for sharing.

And for those of you who don't check the contest, this was modeled after Stopping By the Woods on a Snowy Evening by Robert Frost.

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  • Ellis gold member
    November 27, 2007
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    "Thanks again, Reni, for sharing."

    Thanks again, Paul, for sharing.


  • Ishtar
    June 2, 2007
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    Meh.
    I'll never stop loving this poem.


  • SexyAngel0418
    June 2, 2007

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    you did a great job on this one grampa!!! i really enjoyed it!!! Keep up the great work!!!!

    Hugs,Beth


  • B Chandler
    May 30, 2007

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    This is sooo unfair Paul Dont be offended at this cause you have a natural talent at rhyming while I look like a timid mouse at rhyming. Nevertheless, I loved how this told a story within a story. Keep penning


  • Poetic Rage
    May 29, 2007

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    Journey of Life

    One's heart nor soul could guide us to where we belong only our internal being knows where we really belong in life.....

    The journey in which we all seek to take is a life long one...

    Great Write....


  • Legend silver member
    May 26, 2007

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    I first came across the poem Stopping by the woods Way back in time I believe it was used in the old film Manchurian Candidate,or a couple of the lines were This made me check out the poem.I love what you have done with the form It has the same wonderful flowing feel as Frosts Great work I love it


  • MargaretG
    May 20, 2007
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    Excellent meter and rhyme - and what an interesting story.
    This tradition of praying the sunrise and sunset gives good structure to the poem. The birthday meditation is very sad. My experience shows that we can't go back, however much we wish to.


  • ibsons hysops
    May 19, 2007
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    Awsome!


  • Gatlianne
    May 14, 2007
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    Wonderful

    this is remarkable - beautiful - just plain good


  • AureateCorona
    May 14, 2007

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    wow daddy... i love it. your poems like this always bring a tear to my eye. you have an absolutely amazing talent for expressing such endearing emotions with such effortless beauty.

    wonderful wonderful piece....

    ~kerri


  • Molassis
    May 13, 2007

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    Pops, this is a wonderful piece! I love your writings and I've sorry that I've missed reading so many of them! Work calls far too often for me it seems...

    This piece is extraordinary... really good! The flow is perfect and the repeating of the last line brings it home and makes a powerful point...

    I find myself wishing that I could find where I belong... it seems there IS no place that I belong... and so I feel somewhat incomplete...

    Anyway... this piece is awesome Pops... as always!!!

    Much love to you...



    ~Melissa

  • Ishtar
    May 13, 2007

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    Wow...I just got emotional and teary reading this, Paul.
    I really, really don't know how you do it... It's, like, you knew exactly what I was thinking and feeling. Looking at that poem, from where it starts to where it ends, I can't disagree with one word of it.


    It speaks every single word I feel most of the time. It made me homesick, but then again almost everything makes me homesick.
    You're such a amazing writer. I really, really love this poem. It's has become my favourite by far.

    Love,
    -Reni the Granddaughter-ish.


  • Lysithea
    May 13, 2007

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    Not only is Reni's paintin amazing, but your words also take the reader's breath away. I always enjoy your writing and your rhyming is absolutely perfect. It's nice to see that you found some time to write something so lovely amongst all your... Tennis officiating. Busy man, yess'm. Teehee.

    Hugs and Mucho love to you, Sir.

    ...Lovely poem, as always...

    ♥


  • catz Moderators member
    May 12, 2007

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    What an interesting tradition for Reni to take pictures of the sunrise and sunset on each birthday.

    Your poem and her painting compliment each other so well. A beautiful and unique interpretation of Rei's painting

    Good luck in the contest


    Dee


  • cali951
    May 12, 2007

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    I like it

    I like this poem and the pictuer. I sometimes wish I could go where I belong than i remember im stuck in reality. As i look at that picture i picture being that woman standing there living in paradise.

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