I know that it's my fault
that our "so close" friendship died
But it's your fault too
I mean, couldn't you have tried?
I just was trying to help,
But my avice just seemed to hurt
I know eventually you will listen
Pick my words out of the dirt
I tried so hard
But we were falling
Someone picked me up
But you were falling
You were falling so fast
And you don't know how hard I tried
It wasn't an ultimatum
Because you don't know how much I cried
Did you cry?
Or just leave without a word?
We were so close, and now so far
But I just couldn't put up with you
overrating, exaggerating, dissapointing...
I was always so disapointed.
I was always the one to call.
I was always the one to try.
I was always the one to pick you up.
You know, I think about you every day
Wonder what it would have been like
If I had just held back my tears.
Called again.
Tried again.
Picked you up
Again, again, again.
Did you cry?
Or just leave without a word?
Author notes
Katey - this is for you. This is my side, if you want to hear it.
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I like how you made a reference to yourself but expressed that it wasn't all your fault. I like the phrase "pick my words out of the dirt". It shows that your words are still there to help, she just needs to realize it.
great job on your poem. I know it means a lot to you.
I love (wuv) you. : )
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huh. i don't know how i feel about this. you used the word falling so much. but i really felt the emotion of the poem and could definately relate
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i have to say that this trigured something in me. i feel kinda similar, a strange feeling about a lost friend. you don't seem to know who's fault it might be thast this friendship is over, but you seem to have tried. and i say seem because you always have to aknowlege the other side, i wonder often of the girl i knew and use to call a friend, and i wonder if we are friends, i wonder will she do as she says she will? continue to try to contact me, to convice me that she is a good friend, yet i dought she will, i dought that she would see why i suffer, why i feel the way i do. can she understand what happened and why what was said is so wrong and so and the actions speack louder. i'm sorry for your loss of friendship, sorry for pain that you feel, and i hope it gets better.
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wow...i love this poem. me and my best friend we're just going through this...only i was the one who didn't try...i never ment to hurt her and i was so hurt when she gave up on me. it took me a year to realize it wasn't her fault..it was mine. we just started talking 2 days ago and i couldn't be happier. i'm trying and she is to. i hope everything works out ok for the two of you.
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I'm going through the exact same thing. Again. For the millionth time this year. Some part of you wishes you could go back, but at the same time you learn people change and that one day you'll look back and see all the signs and realize that drifting is natural. It's when we realize our needs and dreams are changing.
But there are more fish in the sea, and you'll find a friend willing to share the weight of a friendship
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......................................................Wow, wow, wow, wow, wow. I can relate to this SOOO well, and I know (I'm pretty sure) exactly how this feels. This poem is exactly how I've felt for the last two years...it's just amazing, I can just relate to this poem so well and it feels like you pulled the thoughts from my head and put them here...wow. I really don't know what to say, except wow. This is just amazing. Wow.
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This reminds me of my poem "Im Sorry" which I wrote to a friend that I made self harm i introduced drugs to i fucked up her life then when mine was going fine she fucked me over. I loved her in my own sick way and she hurt me more then any other freind ive had. but I guess when I showed her her parents lives and told her i was raped i sent her over the edge and found out that shed been raped around the same time. Because we didnt trust each other enough to say when we were friends there is nothing i can do to comfort her and that hurts. wonderfully sad poem I hope you review mine. I wrote anoughter "Open Again" the night she fucked me over any questions feel free to ask.
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wow
Good job with this. I had a friendship like this once. My "friend" just used me for the most part, at least that is what it felt like to me. You did really well with this I just saw one area that may need work. Your spelling of overreacting is wrong in this line, "overrating, exaggerating, dissapointing...". Or did you mean it the way it is? Anyway you did well.
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This really hits home.... I have one friend that I feel almost exactly this way...But I haven't given up... yet... I've tried for a long time now... and it seems like I'm getting nowhere...and I am to the point where I just want to give up, walk away, so I don't have to deal with anymore...But what if I'm the only person that never gives up? What if I'm the one that actually makes a difference in his life? What if I'm the true friend he really needs, yet doesn't know it yet? *sigh* all those things run through my mind when I think about giving up on this "friendship".
Anyways..I'll quit my ramblings now... Great poem. I saw one spelling error...Second stanza, second sentence- Advice. Thought the second and third stanzas were a little choppy, but overall great poem! Very relatable to.
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a very good poem.
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perfectly fits alot if people. its really good!!!
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"I know eventually you will listen
Pick my words out of the dirt
Great description
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