Why must this ivy steal the thunder
Why must it conceal the joy
Everything around it is saddened
Feelings and trust are destroyed
It captures the trusting, caring and loving
And pulls them away from true friends
Its deception fools the smartest
Leaves more sadness than one comprehends
The victim is caught unawares
It is showered with laughter and fun
But behind the falseness is a sly being
Too pompous to leave feelings undone
The victim was surrounded by love
From one source or another or another
It is gullable to the extreme in a nice way
It radiates love like no other
Can the victim return to normality
Not dazed by those unjust?
Can it trust its old friends again
And be surrounded by love and trust?
Author notes
This was inspired by a conversation with two of my friends who i love very much. This is a true story and i dont mean for anyone to be hurt by it. it's just how i feel.
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love it :]
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I think the content of this is really good - spellbinding in fact - but the structure is a bit off. You rythm sort of does some funny stuff in places, and it does disrupt the flow and therefore spoil the effect a little, but as i said, the content is super. You have described this really well and although I don't think it is instantly obvious who it is about (even if you know them, like I do) once you look you can spot certain phrases that give subtle hints and stuff!
Keep up the good work, ma cherie.
Katie -
Ahhhh the webs we weave! This was a creative and expressive write, we have all in live, well at least at my age!...been caught in one or more of these webs. Geeez, I still get caught in them, ha! We just learn and move forward, trust will never be quite the same, you can trust again, as the other party or parties have to learned...well, some of them do. Regardless, we learn, another of lifes lessons. It is awesome that you can express yourself, let someone know how they made you feel, you are already one step ahead of me at your age! Awesome write, keep it up
~Tia
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it is a very good poem, with lots f intricut deisgn.
notice i did not give ur name this time. lol
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actually no you aren't the ivy nikki
but you know who is if you think about it. -
is amy the victim by any chance, and i am the ivy?????
an dont worry im not stressed .
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