Powerless-Still Breathing-2007
You whispered nothing into my ear,
but somehow it almost changed my life
I did it all for the better,
but do you know if I did it right?
You dragged me through,
in and out your black hole
wondering if I could see,
your lost and empty soul.
Your words speak for everything,
everything I couldn`t understand
your words try to seek
out anything, too many things,
always searching all over again.
My weakness and innocence,
you take this in silence
I am powerless
but you still gave me a chance
still thinking I`m reckless,
so many broken promises,
pulled away from happiness,
still trying to make this...
life more of MY compass.
I`ve lost my way,
your way carried me on
I`ll sit another day
but I`ll be a buried song
listen to my voice,
it makes no difference
given no choice,
I follow my distance.
This morning with sun rise
this night falls with blurry eyes
this agony inside
this beating of my hands,
I lift my feet to stand aside
he says to me,
"Take a seat,
You won`t survive."
I try to pull myself together
but with every attempt I fail
standing with sore shoulders,
I soon realized,
these boulders must set sail.
Sunken to the bottom,
like everything I`ve known
trying to swim pass the current,
gone to places unknown
I`ve been taken,
awaken than forsaken
by my hero, my partner
my guidance, my friend
left me all alone
in this world..
Once again.
Author notes
I cannot be helped.
Powerful... ?
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POWERFUL...
Explosive piece of work...I feel you bro...You've painted this portrait very well...The rhyme scheme and flow kept me on my toes...I felt like reading this piece out loud, butthen I knew I'd be kicked out of this Internet Cafe...I enjoyed this...Shalom
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wow
this was really powerful write...i know i can kinda relate to this...great job!!!!
~mandy -
Powerful indeed. This piece is really well expressed, giving so much raw quality of thought and weaving it within. I like the randomness, creating a very intense stretch of reasoning. Well written, incorporating much of yourself. Great write!
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I adore this
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is so but so beutiful i loved it is so sad but still awosome
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i agree with the other comments.. i really enjoyed this.. especially Sunken to the bottom,
like everything I`ve known
trying to swim pass the current,
gone to places unknown
I`ve been taken,
awaken than forsaken
by my hero, my partner
my guidance, my friend
left me all alone
in this world..
Once again.
Awesomeness
Heather -
this is rockin... I like it alot!!! ^-^!!!!!!!!
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Aww, this is so powerful...It's one of those you could just read over and over again. Making it on your own is never easy, and most of the times a friend will be with you. But, then again there's always a time where you will HAVE to do it on your own. Oh my gosh! I totally loved it, it's beautiful.
~Poetrydove~ -
this is really a powerful write, i think we all go through these emotions where we do feel powerless. But you can't always depend on alot f people. sometimes you have to make it on your own. great write
you can be helped...............it just matters if you want help youself sometimes
~Bloved~
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Ryan, we are all powerless in this world, some way or another. My favorite part was the ending.
Powerful indeed!! but..you arn't alone.. ever!
Nice write! ♥
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this is something like a war story, told by a soldier who saw a friend, hero to them die. i like this poem and it is something else i will admit that. you haev done something golden. but no matter what you say, a true friend will never let you suffer alone. you will learn that one day. and yes this was powerful
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Awh!
That was great! I loved it! Ryan! You must help yourself first!! Hahaha. I liked this, very well written, the description was very detailed. Like a story with not so much of a happy ending!
Sunken to the bottom,
like everything I`ve known
trying to swim pass the current,
gone to places unknown
I`ve been taken,
awaken than forsaken
by my hero, my partner
my guidance, my friend
left me all alone
in this world..
Once again.
Loved the ending!! Muaaaahz xx0x0x0x0
♥
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