a mere mortal man,
getting a hard-on
for the closest kid.
who do we think
he is?
when we have that trust
and he's exploited
our young...
a mere mortal man,
that can do nothing
but spout the words
of Holy (subliminal) God
cannot deliver us
from this
make believe Hades...
So lets break out
the flesh eating nuns
that spout the liberation
that doesn't exist
and lets crack the rulers
and the erasers
and figure out
what the fuck
is going on...
what the fuck
is going on?
Hello Mr. Peter,
and Paul,
and Mother Mary,
are you watching
over me today?
Over this
non-extistential life (lie)?
I shoot your truth
through my pure veins
and it scalds
like none before...
bathe me in your glory
and take away my sins
from the false God
that we have all known.
Please.
So I may drink from
carnal knowledge
& your fountain of youth
just once again
this time will count
A contest entry
- An anarchistic view of christianity and all it's delusional crap by Nogod.
500 points, ended May 12, 2007, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i actually didn't really like this one.. maybe because i'd consider myself a Christian, fucked up one, but still... your words are really powerful though, and the poem itself is amazing, i just don't agree with the message!
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hmmmm i forgot to applaud
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I think this is very well done! It sounds like spoken word poetry? I can just feel the rage. Good luck!
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LOL..I laugh. But that's a good thing. I can't get as much out of poems as other people, I just read it, like it, or hate it. Well, I don't hate it, so that leaves the other option. This bunch of rambling bullshit words your're now reading means I want to comment on this poem is a positive light with gushing metaphors and over the top enthusiasm. But I can't so, lets just say, I like it.
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Nicee write
this is a rather...dark poem.
i love the provocation for thought it provides
can't quite figure out the bunny (^^)...
but the creativity is great.
Peace
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Liked the brevity of the lines and the variance of them as well. alliteration and such good use of questions in this poem. Certainly makes one think, but then that's what poems should do, no matter what you believe in.
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