I look up
as a tear rolls slowly
down my cheek
I think about better days
and wonder if I'll feel that way again
you look at me
with those eyes I know so well
always serious, so deep and insightful
as though you're always in control
But not today
not now
Now you look so scared
like for once you don't have the answer
I gaze at you
looking deep into those hazel eyes
Hoping to understand
why you've said those things you did
I wonder for a moment
if this is all a dream
if I shall wake in the morning
and be relieved
you look at me
with a confusion I have never seen
slowly pull me towards you
and wipe the tears from my cheek
A contest entry
- Best Poem(s) You Have Ever Wrote by NickelleteXninja.
550 points, ended June 15, 2007, 140 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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It seems as if you have a rhyme scheme that you are trying to use but it fades in and out of focus…. (if that makes sense)
Its an okay write, I don’t know if it’s your best, but its not the best I’ve seen so far… add a better one if you have one
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wow
ure really good ure a lot better than me. i really like it well done.
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