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Mary had a little lamb
that had a sooty foot,
and everywhere that Mary went,
his sooty foot he put.
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Bazza
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A contest entry
- MORE FRACTURED NURSERY RHYMES/ adult only please. by piccola.
700 points, ended May 14, 2007, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Please tell me what you think
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Hehe nicely done
good luck in the contest !
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Thanks tor entering
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Thanks for your entry. I shall read it thoroughly upon judging. White it's obvious which title you chose, please put it in your AN as stipulated.
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Oh no! I bet Mary got quite sick of cleaning up after all that soot. However, if she should ever get lost in the forest, she wont be needing any breadcrumbs will she?
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Congrats on the silver!
Adorable. All the best in the contest with it
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Short, sweet, and to the point. I see that Mary's lamb was the bad guy here. Interesting twist I must say, for I had always pictured Mary blaming the lamb for her troubles. Very interesting tale, written in a very interesting way. Well done.
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G. Sir that was so nice
Blessings
Vibiesh
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My name is Mary Grace>>>: ) Funny and beautiful. Shapes the original one quite well...
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Nutter! This is very funny Barry, come on admit it, you're just a big kid at heart aren't you? (well I know I am) Other people enjoyed this too as I see it's a trophy winner - well done you.
Vonnie
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funny!
heheee.. graet humor! you're the kind of person with a great sense of humor but with kind of wisdom within.. nice
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I had to!
My daughter's name is Mary so I had to comment. Very cute and one to be repeated. I had a good laugh at this. Great write.
Hugs and love,
Petratani
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nice short rhyming poem
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I can see the tiny hoof prints now. very cute and thanks for the entry.
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Good morning Barry,
Wonderful little rhyming poem my friend. Gave me a much needed smile this morning. Just sitting here this Mothers Day morning thinking of Brian and missing him. Thank you!! Your poem was funny!!! You take care and enjoy the rest of your day. Love ya, Sandy 
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hehehhehehe. i like sooty and foot. there's the assonance there. this poem is really tongue and cheek.
sooty, foot, put. there's almost a slant rhyme in foot and put.
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Nice turn of phrase, bruuder...I like it much
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Nicely done
Very cute My friend well enjoyed (Lisa)
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esroddo
Thanks Lisa for your nice comments and applause.
Barry
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clever
Hello Bazza,
This is quite the humorous spin you have spun on Mary
I enjoyed the read and wish you all the best in the contest.
Don
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Cute one.
This is a very cute one and one that we will remember. I often rewrite nursery rhymes. I did one on Humpty Dumpty. Haha.
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