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Thread

Thread

The needle of my love, threaded with my soul.
I need you by my side and never let me go.
I carefully entwined; our hearts to make a whole.
When I become your bride, I want you to know,
a seamstress of a kind; that is my life’s roll.
I promise to provide, the thread of love to sew.
We’re certainly not poor and know we aren’t rich.
I’ll keep us sewn together with a binding stitch.

 

 

Author notes

Ottava Rima with internal rhyme

A Ottava Rima is a poem written in 8-line octives. Each line is of a 10 or 11 syllable count in the following rhyme:

one octive poem. abababcc
two octive poem. abababcc, dededeff
three octive poem. abababcc, dededeff, ghghghii

Reference: shadowpoetry.com

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  • creationsfromheart
    July 9, 2008
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    this is great it is cute yet romantic and so creative love this completly.


  • Swan song gold member
    May 13, 2007

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    This is very good. When I read it the second time it seemed the middle rhymes are softer than they actually are meant to be. It is not good or bad I just noticed it. Very good like always. You had to be an A student in school.


  • BilateralEmbrace
    May 13, 2007

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    Love It!

    Great job!! The whole thing sounds great, and has tons of feeling, i can tell this comes from your heart, keep it that way. Poems that aren't from the heart i don't know if they are poems at all. But this one is amazing, and you used your heart.


  • Swan song gold member
    May 12, 2007
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    THE POEM IS SO SMOOTH YOU CAN BARELY TELL IT RHYMES
    WELL DONE


  • roses on fire
    May 12, 2007
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    i like it a lot mom you ROCK!!!

    love you!


    • Amera gold member
      May 12, 2007

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      Thanks baby! I miss you, I don't see you as much on line as I used to. You are always in my prayers.

      Love,
      Mom


  • Whoochi gold member
    May 11, 2007

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    Always teaching me Dollface...and this is lovely thoughts, love/hearts being stitched together....Very unique, creative perspective *heart*


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    May 11, 2007

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    Amen...

    a seamstress of a kind; that is my life’s roll.
    I promise to provide, the thread of love to sew.

    ....


  • Dalaney gold member
    May 11, 2007

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    Holy cow...what a seamstress you are!
    Me, I would just end up pricking my
    finger and cussing...sigh...you are
    so much better at this than I am, and
    I love you for it Lane


    • Amera gold member
      May 11, 2007
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      Thanks Lane, your comments mean so much to me. I love you


  • neenabean
    May 11, 2007
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    a beautiful poem, thank you and good luck


  • takenfromgrace
    May 11, 2007
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    awwwww this is very pretty. I love it.lol


  • Desire gold member
    May 11, 2007

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    Aaaaaaaaw Danggggggg!!

    What a verse You have penned and the images from Your words are stunning...
    next to that picture too
    Love the form You used and one I had a hay day with!
    Loved this piece versed!!!
    Feel the Love

    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    May 11, 2007

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    Powerful imagery. Great metaphor. You are so sweet sometimes. I bet you'll make a wonderful wife. Three bunnies for this!!!


  • Tercil gold member
    May 11, 2007

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    Another Amera Wow

    In my book the 3 fates are speaking about the severing of life, the seamstress in that speaks of a variation on what you speak of, quite the binding stitch that in reverse has charmed. The maker of love is a biological effort, and in this piece, two are knitting together quite admerably. There is so much warmth of heart. That is usually mssing in works of this nature, excellent.

    • Amera gold member
      May 11, 2007
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      Thanks so much Titus. You're right, I haven't seen another love poem done in Ottava Rima. Wonderful comment.

      Love,
      Amera


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    May 11, 2007

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    I loved this...The whole concept of a love thread being used to hold lovers close was so beautiful.
    So romantic....
    Soulful Woman


  • JohnnyD gold member
    May 11, 2007

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    AHHHHHHHHHHHHHH, this was so touching Amera, this was one of those truly from the heart and soul writes I love so much. Oh yeah,, this flowed wonderfully and the word flow and metaphors used were really great!

    Bravo!

    dad

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