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I Love You (expanded)

Sittin’ here with paper and a pen
I tear it up and start over again
Searchin’ through my mind
Just trying to find a line
To let you know just how much I love you

When I’m down the words just seem to flow
But girl you have my heart all in a glow
I could try and quote McKuen
But his words I fear I’d ruin
So I’ll just smile and tell you that I love you

‘Cause words are not enough
And that really makes it tough
To let you know just how I feel inside
But I have to find a way
To let you know today
My love for you I can no longer hide

When we talk the words just come out wrong
So I thought I’d send the message in this song
But I find it quite a fight
To find the words that sound right
So I’ll just smile and tell you that I  love you

But words are not enough
And that really makes it tough
To let you know just how I feel inside
But I have to find a way
To let you know today
My love for you I can no longer hide

I’ll just smile and tell you that I love you

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  • Melissa Burns
    March 21, 2008

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    Love this poem, nice rythm to it - thanks a ton for entering into my contest and congrats on the previous wins


  • daviscth silver member
    March 5, 2008
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    Loved the last line.


  • raingoddess gold member
    November 1, 2007

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    Beautiful

    This is a very beautiful poem, full of emotion, you have done an excellent job here, thank you for entering my contest and good luck.

    raingoddess


  • Beating gold member
    August 10, 2007
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    just forgot - you didn't follow the rules. Please read them through, otherwise you can't proceed to the next round.


  • Beating gold member
    August 10, 2007

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    oh! This is so sweet and beautiful, I love it! The repeating part made it really strong, and the ending is really good. It just made me smile! Truly amazing!


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    May 12, 2007

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    "I could try and quote McKuen
    But his words I fear I’d ruin"
    I remember listening to Rod McKuen on the radio- I thought he was the ultimate poet! And dreamy, too. That was a long time ago.

    I especially like the first 2 verses/ stanzas. The fourth one seems weak. Is this a song lyric or a poem? Or both?

    AS a poem, it's stronger with just the first 3 stanzas, and the final line at the end.

    You get claps for mentioning Rod McKuen!


  • sublimewriter
    May 11, 2007
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    what a beatiful poem you're a romantic. i can tell


  • Entwining Beauty
    May 11, 2007

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    this is such a beautiful poem and as always well written beautiful

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