Each person has
something new to show you
about the things
that run through their heads
life goals or memories they dread
a new way to dress
standing out among the rest
a desire for things
that may not please you
then there are those
whose life goes
according to the things
that they see you want
they pretend to be
the things they thought
were cool
well this poem
goes out to all of you.
here goes;
you wake up everyday
and Pray to be the same
but lets just Say, one day
you're not the Same as
the people who Claim
to Complete you
what would you do
if every corner you turn
there's someone with something to learn
do you teach them? preach them
try to reach them?
or do you compete with them
close your door on them
do you accept them
for the things that they are
for the things they do not respect You for.
let's not ignore the snickering
uncontainable bickering
the light bulb flickering
in the room up above you
people talking of you
claiming your flaws
like you're treatable
not repeatable
like your broken
misspoken and lost
who can tell you
the songs that you dance to
prance to. expand you in a way
no one can say that you're wrong
to be singing your song
with words that You wrote
maybe words caught in your throat
that's like saying you are unable to vote
a conspiracy, and it's clear to me
can You see? all of this
or are you missing
the big picture, the meaning
behind this lecture
can you read it?
feed it, with the knowledge soon to be gained?
a mind left untrained
we are all unique
we all have something that We seek
take a peek
inside my Life
but, don't discriminate
don't label things
that you don't know you hate
believe in fate
let your life shake
with things you don't believe
things you refuse
to use in your mind
you bind up all the things
that you've been told, that have been said
we are different
did you hint that?
can you catch That?
should i Repeat that?
something you need to contain.
don't restrain
don't refrain
don't complain
we are unique.
that is all that i seek.
Author notes
my attempt at a slam poem for a contest at my school...
tell me what you think..
it's not great, i realize this.
but it's a rough draft.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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great poem! perfect rythm and theme
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This poem is slammin!
the flow is amazing.
the message is too.
the rhymes were head on and the theme iswell developed.
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lol thnks.
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i appreciate the comment.
|aiko|
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ohOhoh! I wish you had entered this in my slam contest! So many people didn't get it, and I definitely would have given you the gold. This is FANTASTIC. I am hoping you performed it (or still plan to). You formatted this perfectly, and the rhyme was BEAUTIFUL. This poem touched me. It reminded me of something from Def Poetry Jam, and I seriously think I need to go dig that out. Very catchy. You have a true talent. Please keep writing and performing!
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hey thanks.
i wish i would have known you had a slam contest up..
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maybe next time?
thanks for the feedback.
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|aiko|
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Great
Truly a slam poem. Ha!
My first thought was that the short sentences was annoying, and that you should put some of them together, but I guess those short lines works well, when it's supposed to just hit you (slam).
I love the ending lines. "We are unique, that is all that I seek"
btw - you did not put I in capital, which it should be. -
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Lol thanks for the comment.
I really appreciate it..
I've never written a slam poem.
so I wasn't sure if there was a format..
I just wrote how I felt I should.
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and yeah.. There are some capitals in there that I need to fix.
but I get a little lazy..
thanks again.
|aiko|
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Awsome!! Truely great, well done. You obviously have a talent for this kind of poetry!
Pho x
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I really appreciate the comment.
thanks.
|aiko|
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hey thats really cool, I think it would sound great aloud.
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Thanks, i hope so.
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|aiko|
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This is great and the flow is incredible, I can definatly see this being read on an open mike night.
Great message too.
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Thanks.
I enjoy slam poetry..
how about you?
how've you been lately?
long time no talk..
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|aiko|
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i like this but i have one thing i do not understand, what is a slam poem. but as i was saying, i love this pome you spoke your heart and i loved it, keep it flowing
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lol slam poetry is poems meant to be read aloud. Quickly.. my english teacher described it somewhat like rapping.. only different.
I'm not sure how to explain it. but it's probably my new favorite form of poetry.
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thanks
i enjoy your feedback.
|aiko|
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Spelling errors need fixing, but it's a slam (I think that means spoken) contest so that doesn't really matter. I liked the use of rhyme here. This was a good poem about society.
Pozo
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yeah I noticed the errors when i was writing it, but it was late, and i was being rushed to get off the computer. Besides being rushed i was writing it as i put it together in my head, and i can't type as fast as my mind works. lol.
but yeah.. with a slam poem it really doesn't matter about spelling.
more-so the meaning behind the poem.
thanks for the comment.
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|aiko|
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