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Vision Hidden in Eyes

His eyes are the color of a mud puddle.
When dappled sunlight trickles throukgh forest trees,
the water shines in golden patches,
    warmly
his hands are always warm,
    a form,
like perfection
  the corners
of my eyes always
see form
a ghost from a good dream
sea foam,
laughing voice,
but he is a ghost real

reach out both arms into the
        thin air
and thick darkness, thicker than silence
sliced into delicious slices,
all that exists is your face and your eyes
                      and your lips, moonlight
burned inside my eyelids,
lasting longer than the sun's stupid scorches
and tasting like happiness,
scented of nothing
                  but you
are the sweetest scent
ever to hide in my nose,
and travel to my lungs in breath
              and stay there.
For I will never exhale.

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  • Do.
    April 7

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    I can't even read this it's too good.
    This really speaks to me... in the way that I want it to, but it's creative and wonderful.
  • QuietKeysXXX
    May 15, 2007
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    That R Kelly is a real charmer...

    I dont even know what line breaks are.

    All I know is that when there is a break in my lines of coke I throw a fit! Gotta keep that stuff nice and thin, know what I mean.

    I gave you three faces with a total of six hands raised. AllPoetry needs more coke junkies like us.


  • Swan song gold member
    May 10, 2007
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    a very good poem i like the last few lines the most