Its just not enough!
What I do is not enough!
Class work is not enough
Homework is your grade
I can't make my life any better
Nor any worse stuck in a rut
So I stay here
Ready for my 6 year plan
As I'm too stuborn for HW
And with grades
As low as mine I can't do any "extraciriculars"!
I'm not allowd to have friends
Extraciriculars are how to meet people
But I no longer know myself
All because I don't believe in homework
I believe in positively rewarding
But what does that mean
When recieve nothing for doing good
Does it mean I am nothing
Alas it does
I don't have friends
no friends i don't know how to be social
I can barely plan anything
I fail at more than classes
I know how to get good grades
But shall I do homework?
No! I have come too far to give up
I am stubborn
When it comes to school
I'm tired of it, but ready for 3 more years if i must
But I cannot have friends
I cannot enter sports or clubs
But this depression is from not having friends
Causing me to have low grades
Not letting me have fun
Not letting me have friends
Is there no other way than homework
Homework is 80% of my grade
Too bad for teachers' good grade bonuses
Author notes
i realized what causes my infinite depression.
low grades --> knowing no one--> doing nothing -->low grades
i try to do things but you need the grades for that. All I can do is work. I don't know what its like to hate work as its my most social part of the day.
In a list
A contest entry
- WHAT WAS YOUR HIGH SCHOOL EXPERINCE by marlenambolden.
500 points, ended May 17, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - sadness and darkness and anything society dosent like. by Emo Cowboy14.
1200 points, ended June 8, 2007, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ouch ouch! i am sorry for u, i hope its all well.. yeah, and this vicious cycle of low grades.. a great write.. well expressed thoughts.. luv and cheers, shuvi
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hmmmm. very diffent. i see what you mean on how you dont like hw and how it pulls you down. the poem is good. good luck.
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It gave me an idea for a new poem.
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this is good.
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i agree about the american school system being a piece of shit, but it's not gestapo. if it WERE it wouldn't be churning out high school graduates who read and write at a second grade level. i've been out of school for fourteen years now, and the significance of that period of life has much faded with the passage of time. i know it sucks but
(extraciriculars=extracurriculars) aren't the only way to meet people.
anyway, this is an interesting piece, but if i may make suggestions - you should change the first stanza. it's very weak and doesn't draw the reader in the way you're wanting to. Also, watch your spelling and punctuation. There are quite a few misspellings and places lacking punctuation, and the lack of proper punctuation usually causes the flow of the piece to become stilted. And, if you change the wording just a little bit here and there, this will come across as more of a rant, and less of a whine. Did that make sense? Hope so. Anyway, not a bad start. Good luck!
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The american school system is such a gestapo piece of shit. they measure you by your worth to society and your ability to take orders and repriand you if you dont fit into the perfect picture. instead of letting you find and develope your strengths they just put you into boxes and hope you earn enough money to take care of yourself.
that taken into account: good write.
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thank you for the comment.
Other than disagreeing that they "put you in boxes and..." i completely agree with this comment.
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