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Magic Box

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Magic Box

I have a secret deep inside,
a magic box that I can hide.
The little box protects my pride.
Demons reside, demons reside

The demons under lock and key,
so they no longer bother me.
I’ve locked you there so now you see.
It keeps me free, it keeps me free

You left me causing so much pain,
broke my heart and left it bane.
The box is there to keep me sane.
You left a stain, you left a stain

I’m thankful for my secret box,
it keeps me crafty like a fox.
The sad emotions that it blocks.
My magic box, my magic box

So now you’re under lock and key,
and there’s no way you’ll bother me.
So now the demons live with thee.
I’ve been set free, I’ve been set free

 


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Monotetra

The monotetra is a new poetic form developed by Michael Walker. Each stanza contains four lines in monorhyme. Each line is in tetrameter (four metrical feet) for a total of eight syllables. What makes the monotetra so powerful as a poetic form, is that the last line contains two metrical feet, repeated. It can have as few as one or two stanzas, or as many as desired.

Stanza Structure:
Line 1: 8 syllables; A1
Line 2: 8 syllables; A2
Line 3: 8 syllables; A3
Line 4: 4 syllables, repeated; A4, A4

form source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • Master Draconis
    July 27, 2007

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    Oddly, this write reminds of of the tale of Pandora; Human curiosity taken to far and unleashing the worst plagues known upon man. I simply adore the 'revengeful' lines "So now you’re under lock and key,
    and there’s no way you’ll bother me.
    So now the demons live with thee."
    Brings to my mind a terrible visage of delving into Pandoras box to dwell with the evils on man for eternity and ever more.


  • Never Fall in Love
    June 20, 2007

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    To start out with the truth, I don't really like monotetra's. I mean, I love the form and syllable count and everything, I just dont like the repetition. Not only in your poem, but in every monotra I've seen. The repeition is just a distraction .. probably only for me.

    However, that little distraction doesn't take away much from the poem. Your rhyme, and your flow is nothing less than awesome. I might be seeing this with a whole different view, but I see the magic box as a person. Like a best friend, or someone you can just release yourself too. Reminds me alot about yash, when he was still there.

    You also get extra points for your title. Magic is something I've always been attractive too and it really makes the reader want to go and read the whole brilliant poem.

    Excellent poem, and you always keep building the expectations I have from you.

    Love ya
    NeveR ♥


  • crivanea silver member
    May 21, 2007

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    wow..i must say..when i read ur first poem i expected u to be one of those happy go lucky poet who wirtes of nature and stuff..but i love this..i admit.most of my poems are dark and dreary..but i'm extremely impress that u can write a piece like this..make it rhyme..and keep the form interest..i'm terrible w/ rhyming..and i'm always on the lookout for someone who can do a decent job with rhymes..and i love the repitition on the last of each stanza..amazing!!..and thnx u so much for reading my poems!..i appreciate it! (ur an awesome poet..keep up the work..and i hope to read more from u soon..)...btw..this poem is something a lot of us can admit to..the human conscience has an evil side..and when we let the box opens pandora escapes..


  • Swan song gold member
    May 12, 2007
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    you hold strictly to your forms and still get the words across nice


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    May 12, 2007

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    a strong write indeed...

    So now the demons live with thee.
    I’ve been set free, I’ve been set free

    Humm I can see the strongness of the verses..you are a very deep poet my friend..thanks for sharing this write...






  • Death of the Author
    May 12, 2007

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    Oooo awesomeness, the flow is great, they rhyme is too, even the background is pretty classy (if you can call that classy lol) Well done, great write, keep it up x


  • Whoochi gold member
    May 11, 2007

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    Stunning Dollface! Absolutely stunning and kinda scary too...ewwwwww kinda gripping...could feel myself tensing up a little...


  • painfully amazing
    May 11, 2007
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    wow this is amazing..i love the flow... i love the idea too=]..great write..

    noooreo


  • Aeonna
    May 11, 2007

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    dark and beautiful

    *sigh* O' dark poetess, ah: the beat of darkness, you set the scene. fabulous masterpiece.


    red roses


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    May 11, 2007

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    This is an excellent monotetra I love the melodic rhythm of the form with its iambic beat and I especially like the form used within the dark genre of poetry. It somehow gives the darkness an edge of magic. Well done with this and thank you for sharing. La x


    • Amera gold member
      May 11, 2007
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      Thank you Laura, finding a comment from you is like finding one more small wrapped gift under the Christmas tree.

      Love,
      Amera


  • blueyez
    May 10, 2007

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    I love it!!!! I love the backround, the picture, and every word. Splendid darkness


  • Desire gold member
    May 10, 2007

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    Wowzers!!


    Holy Momma!!
    What a piece You have penned
    The images written just raise the hairs and
    add the physical pictures
    -drops -
    Oy!!
    What a form used too

    Loved this!!
    Powerful verse You have here!!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • grannyeri gold member
    May 10, 2007

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    Very creative background for this poem. I do like this form and h ave used it a few times - nice to see it again. Liked the presentation of this piece.

  • diet-pepsi
    May 10, 2007
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    we really need more poets like you in the world.the poem wasincredible


  • PerVirtuous
    May 10, 2007
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    Hmmmm. Interesting. I like it. And I don't like it. It is beautiful. I love you. Three bunnies.

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