is it worth it this time
to go back and think about the problems
[&& cry your fucking heart out?]
is time even worth it
to waste away these perfect feelings
to a beautiful[blood-filled]suicide
the natural high is free to course its way through
and she'll only move it along
by popping those glittered[blue]pills
that spin her mind in circles
&& make her die even more.
so slowly&so painfully her heart begins to race
&& the blood is seeping crimson at her wrists;
shes collapsing;;gasping regrets
as the floor below her drowns in blood
shes tried so hard to get so far
but she ends up backwards[in empty lies]
for every inch she ever got
she needed a mile more to compensate.
in her final goodbye and feeling
she asked for[unheard of]forgiveness
and she asked for them to remember
all the words she ever spoke[in her whispers]
& for all the words she rambled out
when she wasnt really thinking
but the last line[where she asked all to read]
she asked them to lastly hate her
so they can finally see whats good for them
she was never worth it;;
[isnt it sad how it took so long to realize]
her strength has been weakening[so slowly]
&& she forgot what she was all about.
shes been dying in[perfect]weakness
and the drugs have only helped
a shot of [gorgeous] alcohol
runs down her tear stained throat
it mixes in with every chemical she swallowed;;
it leaks out with all the blood.
shes lying in the filtered sunlight;;
the blood is seeping and draining
[[shes becoming too numb]]
her legs numb;then her hips
she cant twist in tragic pain
her hands are too heavy;;
her hair is twisted[wrapped up]in blood
the last thing she saw was his sorry eyes
[he watched her die;;
and she saw him cry]
m. m. o'malley
5-6-07
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#2-Emo-suicide
#3-pictures 3&4
hope this works for you darling.
everything is just way too much for me too take, i cant do it anymore and i dont want to live here...anywhere else would be fine, but not here. i dont think i can survive anymore.
what am i going to do?
beauty of pain--
option 2
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Good job! Amazing.
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thanks much.
♥.love.
HisPrettyLady
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This is a very nice wrte the lines that rally stick out to me are:
shes tried so hard to get so far
but she ends up backwards[in empty lies]
for every inch she ever got
she needed a mile more to compensate.
in her final goodbye and feeling
she asked for[unheard of]forgiveness
and she asked for them to remember
all the words she ever spoke[in her whispers]
& for all the words she rambled out
when she wasnt really thinking
but the last line[where she asked all to read]
she asked them to lastly hate her
so they can finally see whats good for them
Thank you for yur entry and good luck to you xxx
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thanks so much. im glad you liked it.
happy judging
♥.love.
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'shes tried so hard to get so far
but she ends up backwards[in empty lies]
for every inch she ever got
she needed a mile more to compensate.
in her final goodbye and feeling
she asked for[unheard of]forgiveness
and she asked for them to remember
all the words she ever spoke[in her whispers]
& for all the words she rambled out
when she wasnt really thinking
but the last line[where she asked all to read]
she asked them to lastly hate her
so they can finally see whats good for them
she was never worth it;;
[isnt it sad how it took so long to realize]
[he watched her die;;
and she saw him cry]'
Hun, this is just so my gosh emotional && your tipping me over the edge here lol I'm stones skip from crying
=[ great write =]^^ if those words didn't say it all? ily♥
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thanks baby. im crying right now. i cant stop crying. i feel worthless && ashamed. im happy you liked this though.
i love you soo soo much.
♥
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this is how i feel
...right now.
i cannot express how much this poem has struck to my [[black filled]]♥ with a chemical taste *oh so* bitterly sweet;;
why does life have to become this way?? whenever we try our hardest to make it through it's like we take 5 steps forward and 10 steps back.
thanks darlin;;
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i think thats what life is all about, moving forward to walk backwards to prove to someone that your f-ing worth it. thats what i feel like im constantly doing and i know i havent been doing such a great job at it lately. im such a mess, you know that, i think we both are and im so tired of it. i do feel like im falling weak and theres nothing left around to pick me back up. everything drags me down further and further. so idk.
did you see i got a gold on this one though? only thing worth liking right now. idk, i should just get out there and fix this. i just wish i knew how too.
iloveyouforeverandever
♥yours
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oh my gosh dalring. great entry. i loev it so much. but just remeber we all cn make it htu anything. and im sorry u feel like this. GREAT JOB. i loved it so so so much. good luck. =] FINALISTSTTTSS!!
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OMG! i just got the comment, and the win. thank you so much. this gold means so much to me and im soo sooo happy you liked it.
god, thank you.
♥Love
[[Chaos]]
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