So hot,sweltering,devoid of relief.
stale unceasing, rancid deplete.
Hydrational vanquish,
unhinged collect,
Long loss of sustaining.
Frenzy soon seeps.
Refreshment awaiting,
varily spreads.
Cool shady replenishment,
avoiding this dread.
Author notes
option; iii option iii.
Write me a poem inspired by deserts.
Do not include any nouns.
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A contest entry
- Rollin', rollin', rollin'... by deadcolor dreams.
300 points, ended June 13, 2007, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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metaphoric
Each line imbued an image and feelings, that the reader can relate ; it was a kaleidoscopic
collage ,, it seemed to evoke the psyche and its emotions..
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i like your poem. very descriptive, beautiful, and a strong feeling and message. great flow and provokotive and interesting. i love how you remained simple yet went so complex. that is a true poetic talent. just wondering though...you used plenty of nouns; vitality coherency death claim etc. good poem though
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I didn't consider those nouns. More verbs as action words or states of being. A noun being person,place or thing. Although,you may be right. I'm not exactly sure 100 percent. I worked and this piece took time in efforts of avoiding those. Reworked a bit. But thanks for reading.
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BEAUTIFUL!
I have been watching those fires in the south and also in California, it is so sad to see so much beautiful scenery burned away and homes destroyed.
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