I touch your skin. Electricity,
Surging through every part of me.
Just to be this close, stifling
So breath to myself I cannot bring.
Your scent fills me up, intoxicating,
Taking me higher, keeping me waiting.
Ear to chest, hear your heart beating,
Knowing these moments are too often fleeting.
This is too pure to dull with those three words
Strum from my soul's harp chords.
Looking in your eyes all that I need
To see the future that I want to lead.
Please tell me what you think
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Hoodwinked
Awww, this is so beautifdul. Sorry this hoodwink is late. I was not able to get on for three days. Congrats to you for becoming a bandit. -
Hood-Winked!
This is how I feel every time my husband Jason holds me. Such wonderful emotions filled with love throughout. Excellent imagery and flow. Just a beautiful write
You have just been Hood-Winked courtesy of the Poetic Bandits
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HOODWINKED!!!
WOW...How romantic is this? Do you own a freakin patent on romance? You should! Oh by the way you have just been visited by a member of the Poetic Bandits and you are being ambushed because we think you have some awesome talent and we think it is time that you knew it!
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Intense
this is intense...I really like the choice of words. Very well written with a very nice delivery! The intensity ! -
<3
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Lovely
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wow. thi sis really sweet. its little moments like this i guess i have to look forward to. thanks for writin this and sharing it. by the way your adorable.
jess
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Interesting... I'm on the same page krissyismurder is on--this is the first poem of yours I'm reading, and I want to read more. I like the style you used. And I like that it's not ridiculously long--you said what you needed to say and you didn't add any bs to it. Great job. Thanks for sharing.
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i loved it.
this is my first poem of yours that i am reading, and i am destined to read more. -
i really like this
its awesome
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I touch your skin. Electricity,
Surging through every part of me.
Damn that shit
Just cause it's so true
I wish it didn't happen and..
I don't know what to say
I hate feeling this broken
sorry
But this is an excellent write
complex rhymes that make none of your lines predictable
and thats a good thing
keep it up
NeveR ♥
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"to see the future that I want to lead" yes you make your future the way you want it, and having someone who can help you see the possibilites makes it a little easier.
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your talented, i like this one.
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You never cease to impress me Nick. I love reading your poetry. It's as if a part of you is in each one you write. The ability to do that is the sign of a very talented human being. Nice job =].
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