haven't slept in
three damn days
fading as time
slips away
tired eyes
waver and wander
weary and wet
concious dreams
i'll never forget
sleep has passed me by
counting down the hours
before its time to cry
sometimes i feel like
i just want to die
serpent servant,
docile, infantile
thinking of her
makes me smile...
awake,
shed your slumber
and the days
that have your number
only love will keep
me from going under!
Please tell me what you think
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Wow - Great work for sleep deprivation... Bravo Rich
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Glad to hear (from the below comments) that you finally did get some sleep.... I kind of know what you mean about the best writing comming out when ur on the brink of insantity! lol... That is what sleep deprivation does to you for sure.
And I know what you mean about thinking of someone that loves you as a kind of solace. I'm happy for you that you found someone to love and to love you.
~ Diane.
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If you felt like creating a hook line to go with this it would work as angsty lyrics,could imagine evanescence wailing with emotive woe to these words,we may be tired through lack of sleep or conversely tired of the life lived upon waking when it seems like an existence.As a reader who has had disturbed sleep for various reasons for years I can testify to it being akin to torture trying to function after not being able to recharge nocturnally,no wonder sleep deprivation is used as a form of torture by captors,it is highly effective at disorientating and dishevelling a human being.Your title was effective too
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hey thanks, you always leave me great comments. i have yet to buy a guitar (my last was stollen) but i will be buying one this month, and can't wait to start creating music again. it is trully one of my great past times.
being bi-polar, depending what spectrum of the disease that i am at, i'm either sleeping too much, or too little. one time last year i was awake for seven days straight! you wanna talk about almost going crazy, i was seeing and hearing things that weren't really there. i don't think that i want to do that again.
rich
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o richard!
get some rest! i just recently got over REALLY bad insomnia and it's been slowly comeing back. i lay there at night and think of things i shouldn't think of, i try to stay posative and most of the times me mind wonders to you. to try and stay smiling. i've been trying everything to sleep and i would HATE for you to be going threw this same bullshit that i am.
hugs
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i've always have suffered at one time or another bouts of insomnia. this one was shorter then some that i have had to endear, but luckily i got some sleep last night. but i had some really, really weird dreams.
but truthfully, i right the best when i'm a little strung out. the mind sort of dances on the brink of insanity. something that i am accustomed to doing, quite often.
don't worry though. i'm still taking my medication, but insomnia, will always haunt me.
and as always, i am thinking of you, and only of you
rich
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you know, you've got this way of wording things that...that just sort of gets to a person. it's always so genuine, i can't help but wish i could change things, if only for a moment.
no.
what i'm TRYING to say is...everything always sounds so sincere, so genuine, so REAL. there's never any assuming graces. that's the true sign of a poet. i don't think you've ever seemed condescending in any poem. you just...say it. that's funny, so many "poets" end up sounding condescending, and i end up not reading anything of theirs.
anywho rich, get some sleep. it isn't good for you to not sleep. and if you want, you can dream of her when you're sleeping. seriously, i KNOW. sleep deprivation is BAD. B-A-D...BAD!
i'm sorry, i don't mean to goof off, only i'm tired, and i tend to stray when i'm tired.
anyways dear, as usual, the most splendid work of art. and by the way, the fourth stanza...marvelous work of...genius! really, the choice of words is exquisite.
much love,
you know me. (ha ha)
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you always no exactly what to say, when critiquing my work. that's one of the things that i trully dig about you.
and i try very hard not too be condescending. for i have lived my whole life like that under the direction of someone else. you can probably guess who. and i try too not to be anything like that anymore, forever!
lots of love,
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darling, HAPPY BIRTHDAY! sorry i'm SO LATE. but HAPPY HAPPY HAPPY HAPPY BIRTHDAY! so, what's it feel like? silly rich.
i'm glad you're all right. and you aren't one bit condescending.
with ALL the love that ever existed in the universe,
nadia.
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"serpent servant,
docile, infantile"
Perfectly written. Well done.
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this was really good. I liked it a lot. I can relate to the whole sleepless thing too. Hopefully you'll get some soon though. =)
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