Crying sorry
Never works
Especially when the razor
Dosen’t hurt
And the blood flows like
A Ice cold rushing river
Of pain
And you
You play along with my game
Everyday
Sunday
I loved you
Monday
I kissed you
Tuesday
You killed my heart
Wednesday
I felt like it all fell apart
Thursday
I feel better now
Friday
It’s always all ups and downs
Saturday
I don’t remember I slept in
You gave me a rose
But it withered in my hand
Black to red
Crimson hate on my hands
You in front of me
Shock on your face
Replace
Replace me
Just like you always did
Erase
Erase me
Like I wish you would
Author notes
"i dont know"
wordbank:
Razor
blood
heart
rushing
cold
ice
rose
sunday
monday
tuesday
wendsday
thursday
friday
saterday
crying
sorry
black
red
A contest entry
- Emo word bank by xlilliexdiesx.
425 points, ended May 24, 2007, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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That is very nice and emotioanlly packed. Near the end it seems right that you deep want this relationship to end. Am I reading this right?
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ya. people never just let me be after i dont want to be with them anymore.. and thanx
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Ah- I was wondering why you left Saturday in
I was going to advise you removed it as aside from Saturday (and the rhyme) the days of the week part of this worked really well. I found this poem quite sad. 'Dosen't' should be 'doesn't'. I liked the image of the rose here. Good luck in the contest.
Pozo
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wow
wow this is a great poems and i love your writting
i love these 2 parts the most cuz i can relate
1.Crying sorry
Never works
Especially when the razor
Dosen’t hurt
2.Replace
Replace me
Just like you always did
Erase
Erase me
Like I wish you would
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thank you i like it but please go back and put ur username in the author notes. good luck
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This Has A Cool Flow!
Mwah
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