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Not Forgotten(Hay(na)ku)

Gone
But ever
Haunting my dreams

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Hay(na)ku.Six word, three line poem, line one, 1 word, line two, 2 words, line three, 3 words.No rhyme or syllable requirement or restriction.

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  • Poetess12
    October 18

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    This is great. I like what you made out of only a few words. Gone from your sight and haunting your dreams.

    Thank you very much for your entry.

  • poets whisper silver member
    October 5
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    I love it! It's beautiful in its simplicity ... thank you for entering. Not much more I can say. thank you for entering the contest.


  • ReAdInG.iS.sExY
    September 15
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    hmm wow such a deep write. well, well done


  • Kathraina silver member
    September 7

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    Absolutely brilliant write!
    There is so much depth and truth here.
    Marvelous job with this piece


    Bravo and thank you for entering




    ♥ Kate


  • xxvampyregirlxx
    July 7
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    great write thanks for the entry


  • reckless abandon
    June 13

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    wow, only rarely do I find poems this short that manage to say as much as yours does, thanks for entering and great job!


  • Sunkissed xo
    May 23
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    This is really beautiful & well written.
    Thanks for entering my contest!
    Love, Cinnamon Doll.

  • the evil angel
    May 9
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    Fascinating. I've never heard of a haynaku before. I'm deciding not to do it because really, really small poems kind of feel weird. But this poem is very powerful, and I want to congratulate you on that because it is difficult to make something powerful in so few words. Very well done.


  • ItaloEtkin
    April 6
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    very nice actaully....


  • DeadlyPoetic88
    January 15
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    not really full of any one image.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    January 2
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    That is what those whom have left us truly do and of course, those memories we don't want to have.


  • Walk-Free
    December 14, 2008

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    simple, yet impactful.

    someone you love dearly will never leave your mind even if they're not physically present.

    great job

  • Sunkissed xo
    November 27, 2008

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    Wow, this is great! I like the haunting feel it has to it, so powerful, leaves readers with many questions. A wonderful write. Thanks for entering the contest x

  • vampedvixen
    November 4, 2008
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    Short but sweet. Kudos for using a rare form in this work.


  • Swan song gold member
    October 18, 2008

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    Kind of reminds me of that veteren T shirt and amny memories around this country honoring those in uniform


  • Canadamomma
    October 14, 2008
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    Well written, and befitting of the prompt.
    good luck


  • delightfulmess silver member
    May 13, 2008

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    Nice very brief. and packed with emotional imagery.
    Well done and thank you for entering my contest.


    Delila


  • second-born
    February 29, 2008

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    wow...this is such a thought-provoking and an emotion-haunting piece...thank you for sharing an awesome write!!!

  • Virgoan
    September 27, 2007

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    Striking and spine tingling short piece.

    Thanks for sharing and keep on writing my friend.

    VIRGOAN


  • mysticstorm gold member
    May 11, 2007

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    Well done!
    Strong and powerful in short order.
    A haunting and emotional write.
    Thank you for entering!


  • RIP Whoever
    May 11, 2007
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    ~creepy~

    but i guess that's what they do. they leave roses and other gifts to "haunt"


  • Namita
    May 10, 2007
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    Not a bad one.

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