Our love, it shows us much, tonight it does
A kiss with such beauty, and grace I place
Upon your other lips so sweet because
It is there, within my love’s such embrace.
We show each other our love, and that how
In ways that can only be shown to be
That connection is true, for with us now
For now, I wish to make sweet love with thee.
Come to me, bring me your naked sweetness
M’lady, for with that I see your needs
As with mine, those needs have greatness
And come let us see now where that love leads
Come to me m’lady, for it is I
Your true love, for that I cannot deny.
© Jonathan Wikkins July 26, 2003
Revised February 27, 2008
All Rights Reserved
Author notes
Written July 26th, 2003
option 2
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A contest entry
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You have written a perfect sonnet with this poem, and the erotic subject matter isn't something I come across with often in this form
Thank you for the entry, I wish you all the best!
Leander -
Ah, love really is a wonderous thing to feel isn't it. So many different kinds. *sighs* This is a lovely piece and I do like the background too.
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It is not often that I see someone write erotica in a sonnet form.You've done well in both form and content without going overbaord.
Thank you for entering.
Best of luck to you!
Blessings
Bel
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I like this poem, it made me get a good feeling when I read it. I think that you did a great job in capturing the old sonnet form. Great job and good luck in my contest.
~Maria -
Nice
I like the "m'lady" a very old world term that has been forgotten. Thank you for your entry and best of luck in the contest. -
Please edit the background and colour. I cannot read white on white!
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the background has been edited for now with a site background, now i'm trying to figure out how to upload pictures to my pieces
mike -
my custom backgrounds aren't working properly, i'm going to edit it with a site background for now, and change it when i get an answer from kevin, or somebody on what to do about it...
mike
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MIKE THIS IS BEAUTIFUL!!!!!! Yes I agree with Dawn!! You have outdone yourself! I love the "M'lady". Leave it all just the way it is!!!!! I love poetry from the heart and poetry like this should NEVER be changed! ~Laura
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mike, this was truly incredible. it had it all, imagery, love, senusuality, erotic and just really gorgeous. you really out did yourself here. um..i personally liked the M'lady here, gave it that sonnet feel to it of the olden day, which I love. awesome piece hun...awesome
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Mike the Sonnet King :0)
An erotic sonnet?? Now you have really outdone yourself here Mike I would have never thought it possible~~ I do not believe I have ever read or written an erotic sonnet
But here it is from the Sonnet King himself
This was beautifully sensual Mike and these lines...whoa
A kiss with such beauty, and grace I place
Upon your other lips so sweet because
It is there, within my love’s such embrace
Holy moley Mike thats all I can say here
Just beautiful Mike~~ I am looking at the sonnet in a whole different light now LOL
~~Dawn -
Sensual and erotic with great imagery , deep love and all the smut was left out . You delivered beauty and grace in a very powerfully erotic way
Reenie
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Mike, truly awesome. A very Masculine message to his lady, and just plain damn good! Keep it up (no pun intended, but what the hey). Wonderful work
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AMAZING AWESOME
Excellent poem. You did a splendid job in writing this poem. Again, an awesome job and take care, Rick -
erotic and sensual this was hon
but done with such grace and style
I just loved it
Luv u too
Susan~~~~~
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Spellbinding
This is by far the most tender of the sonnets you have written, Mike. It's gentle yet erotically charged. This was written as though it were written to someone the poet would respect and honour, a true Lady, if it were in olden tymes.
Excellent...
Sarah (rhiannon 11) -
So beautiful and so hot and sensual all at the same time. You made my temp rise and didn't get all smutty in the least. I love the mood you have been in lately, it is so refreshing.
Carrie -
OK. Lot of good things happening. Pretty much stuck to sonnet form. Subject delivers from what title promises.
I'd take out the archaic language, M'lady.
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