I will have my sweet sweet release
For you let sweet be replaced with the pain blood and tears
Which you have willingly let flow from my soul
Soon you insolent fool, you wont bother me again
With your taunting games you play with utter arrogance
The shock and pain of the final blow will be one which you feel.
You have woken a sleeping dragon, dont expect to be greeted
with gifts of friendship and gratitude, for you have taunted
the sleeping beast far too many times to be forgiven
I WILL have my sweet sweet release, as the tears will flow
From your little pethetic, judjing eyes not mine
Your head will be greeted by my vengeful fist, and for a second time
Your face wont be creased but scared. And with it comes sweet release
I hope the pain overwhelms you so as your emotions take over
Then as you swing, Ill hit your back, until you spiral out of control
Like a freight train, with no breaks no restraints
This will be my sweet sweet release as again and again my fist kisses
your face, until the blood it pours and the pain it soars
My satisfaction will sky rocket as you double over and cry
And I will get my sweet sweet release
Author notes
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A contest entry
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Comments
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oooh anger
This was pretty darn intense. I could seriously feel our rage and disgust for this person/these people. Great job on conveying your emotions. A few spelling and grammatical errors. If you fix those, you'll be in good shape.
Good job!
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you sound very dasterdly with this one!
Great write! Good Luck in the Contest!
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Wow this was really good. I love how you have it written. iT just really expresses you emotions. great job and thank you for entering it into the contest.
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Whoa! That's really nice. I liked the form and flow of it. How you expressed the emotions so well throughout it. The ending really caught me off gaurd too! But I liked it! Good job, and thank you for entering. Good luck in the contest!
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