I travelled down to Alabama
Looking for a change of pace
Took the Greyhound into Hoover
So I wouldn't have to face
Anymore of your dissections
Of my life that won't conform
To the plans you have created
Just to keep you safe and warm.
So I headed into Montgomery
With another place in mind
Passed through Raleigh on my way to Shiloh
So I could save a little time.
But the days just keep getting longer
And the plans we made gone up in smoke
Like the fires lit to warm us
Left me down and out and broke.
Funny how things change so quickly
One day we're flying oh! so high
Then we'll crash and burn without salvation
Yet I never understand just why
Maybe I'll get back home to you someday
Who knows just what tommorrow may bring
Light a candle and pray I'll hear you
It's hard when you're deaf to everything
And the breezes that console me
Blow oh! so softly here down south
Like the sweet rain on my tongue I know
One day I may still come about
So don't hold your breath I may remain here
One day you may even bring me home
One day you may even bring me home...
Author notes
loosely inspired by Ryan Adams "Oh My Sweet Carolina"
A contest entry
- Music by DepressedAngel.
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Nice, and you did good, I have only one question about this line....
'Anymore more of your dissections'
Is that how you wanted it or were you trying to get something like this....
'Any more more of your dissections'
Just a thought.
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I think this is a lovely reply to this song. You've done really well here. What really appeals to me is how you tried to use the structure of the lyrics in your poem. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck.
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I like this song. It has a very nice flow to it and I liked the story. To me "home" in this seems a little more like Heaven... Just an assumption tho, ethier way I liked the poem. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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hey, thanks for entering the contest. Can you leave a link to the written lyrics or the lyrics themselves in your author notes please? That's just for saving time
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thanks for entering my contest i really like this alot..great job...Heather
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