As you placed your hand in mine
Loving heat shot against the cold air
I became unaware of space and time
Because of you--my Sweet Nightmare
My life was turned upside down
In a moment--so it seems
Like a nightmare you always contradict
All My perfect fairytale dreams
But I can't resist your brown-eyed stare
That looks deep into my heart
Because of it I'm living this nightmare
That's been tearing me apart
My guilty pleasure
My moment to shine
My greatest treasure
Knowing that you're mine
Emotions leaving me alone
To think things through myself
I'm completely on my own
And have forgotten the hurt I felt
I'm definitely losing this game
And life is never fair
Because I've always felt the same
About you--my sweet, perfect nightmare
Author notes
I don't know about this one. It wasn't really based on anything personal, so it's hard to say something. I hope the rhyme doesn't sound forced. I thought the last stanza could've been better. Please give me some thoughts and feedback on this one!
Please tell me what you think
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dont you hate it when that happeneds... you fall in love so deep just to get crushed, yet youre still in love.. anyways, it was good, could've been better like if you put my detail or visual in it, otherwise it was really good -
Another great one, my friend.
"I'm definitely losing this game
And life is never fair"
I like these two lines. I can relate. Also, the first stanza was great. My only suggestion is to capitalize "Nightmare" in the 3rd, 4th, and last stanza, because you had it capitalized in the beginning. Other than that, I like this. Keep it up!
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