the sand in your toes
the gentle lapping of the waves on the shore
the birds above crying for food
the air thick with moisture as the fog dissapates
the red sun rise appearing over the lake
the lonely loon call in the deep
the feeling that nothing matters
just here and now
the splash as a fish jumps close to shore
the sounds of a camp waking up
the crackle of the fire in the distance
and you realize
times like these come once a year
they are the summer dreams to remember
A contest entry
- Chill Out This Summer by Aun Ali.
300 points, ended May 26, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Come and See by celestial.
300 points, ended May 20, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~Your Sanctuary~ by Starretta.
330 points, ended May 19, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - GO for the Gold~ 2nd Chance ~ Sorry Closing earlier then planned~ by Florida Sunshine.
800 points, ended May 30, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Poem(s) You Have Ever Wrote by NickelleteXninja.
550 points, ended June 15, 2007, 140 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I think that this is a good write. I don't think is very true though. I mean I have a nice fire every weekend. And regardless something tends to matter in life almost all the time (except rare occasions)
well done thanks for entering
good luck as well
My cojudge wh isnt listed had this to say
It is nice but I really dont think that is your best work but summer time isnt just all that. Well Im just the co judger but it was horrible. -
This is EXCELLENT ~ It almost takes me back to camp myself~ Just missed the part of the scary stories~ lol .... I know it's the atmospher~ Terrific write~ Thanks so much for submitting it in my contest! nice ot have ya
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wow...while i read this lovely poem i could seriously imagine how these summer dreams are! you really placed perfect expressions in this poem, cool!
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Very good imagery! I too am extremely fond of the beach, ocean, sea, etc. Good luck in the contest!
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This is a nice poem. It's very descriptive and picturesque. I'm looking forward to the summer. Very nicely done. Good luck in the contest. -
Impressive
Another good way to chill out. The camps near the lake and gentle lapping of the waves on shore. Impressive write. Thanks to enter the contest and All the best.
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oh my ghandi! i love it! its so beautiful!
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