"What are you doing!?"
As Mom barges in.
The girl places a razorblade
Into her skin.
Back and forth, Back and forth
Blood flowing like a river.
Pain, she feels not.
Not even a shiver.
This is her task
From day to day.
She just swings the razorblade pendulum.
And her sorrows tick away.
She sheds no tears
Emotion never showing
Alone she sits
Death are the thoughts now flowing.
Author notes
Umm... this was about self abuse/cutting/whatever you wanna call it.
Giving up on me. =)
A contest entry
- deppressed/suicide/hurt/lost love/cutting(SA, SI) by Felix BlackHeart.
375 points, ended May 13, 2007, 30 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ::paper::bags:: &&& &hearts plastic hearts &hearts by XweXareXbrokenX.
1050 points, ended July 13, 2007, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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oooo very very strong and powerful...i love the title it fits oh so well...thanks for the entry...good luck in the contest...
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THIS IS STRONG, POWERFUL STUFF! I love it, it paints a vivid picture and bathes in thoughts of destruction and pain. Very well written. Kudos
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Heh. Thanks. I'm glad you liked it. =)
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this is very good. I love how you use diffrent words and ways of saying things. I really enjoy reading poems that use that in poems. it makes things much better and enjoyable for reading. thanx you soooo much for entering. I really enjoyed the poem.
Felix BlackHeart
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