Skin me like a fish.
You have the knife.
See what is underneath.
broken.
Loveless.
Heartless.
Otherwise you can’t see past my red lipstick?
Tie me on the cross.
It is lit like any other innocent fire on a cold December night.
Chant my name as the flames crawl on me like devilish ants.
Just let me go.
I scream as the flames scorch my face.
I scream:
I don’t want to shed anymore pain.
I don’t want to live in this gloom
I don’t want to know anymore of life’s ungodly pain.
Relationships.
Failures.
Lost.
Empty.
Me.
Go ahead and watch my body burn.
Watch me scream in agonizing pain.
I know you like it.
My hysterics are drowned out.
A DJ starts up a song.
People gather to see me die.
I watch them dance around me as if I were a star in an empty night.
I watch people in their finest evening clothes with makeup to match.
I watch people hugging and kissing.
I watch people getting drinks from the bar.
I watch the drunks consume themselves with the lonesome nighttime beauties.
I yell and I curse.
I curse and I scream.
I scream and I yell.
I cannot be heard.
The music- the people- the joy- so loud.
I burn.
Photographers take pictures of me as I rain blood from my black pores.
They try to capture the best photograph of my scorched body.
One photographer takes pictures of couples hugging in front of my burning body.
Five dollar charge I hear the man say coarsely.
kids are playing in front of my ailing body as they roast Marshmallows.
And I cry.
As if my life were some scenery.
As if my life was nothing more than an amusement.
As if I were a joke.
Just another nobody whose life is a joke.
Whose death is expected.
Whose death is accepted.
As I parish I hear the DJ start another song.
My eyes are burnt to heavily to open.
But I hear.
I hear them dance.
I hear them laugh.
I hear the snapshots.
I hear the music.
I hear joy as my life deflates before their eyes.
Take the picture and frame it on your wall.
What a perfect Christmas Card it would make?
Author notes
Insanity to the MAX- how I feel at times- madness
A contest entry
- deppressed/suicide/hurt/lost love/cutting(SA, SI) by Felix BlackHeart.
375 points, ended May 13, 2007, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - x Bring Me To The Depths of Insanity x by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended June 14, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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If I was to rate this on a scale of one to ten, I would give it a nine. Great imagery thoughtout the entire piece. I love the way you make it feel so real. Thanks for sharing this temporary state of mind. I think we al have felt like this before. I know I have. Great reading and keep on writing
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Yeah just a little bit to the max... But hey, you know, sometimes I feel some of this stuff too. I think we all have temporary states of madness (either that or my pyshciatrist isn't doing his job properly). I understand this well and enjoyed the imagery throughout and the desparation and mocking somewhat witthin some of the lines.
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this was really really good. i like how you can feel the emotion and sadness and sometimes it almost seams like anger. i like the imagery i got when it said the fire crawled on me like devilish ants. wonderful job
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this poem is really good. it was long, but worht reading it all. I love it, cause tehres so much more behind the words it seems. you were very vivid on what you said. thanx you for entering, your poem is very good.
Felix BlackHeart
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very deep
What a dark way of emotion. I think it was a good start to a unfinished poem. It needs alot of editing and sacrafice of words to fit together a little better. -
this is a great poem. I can really see it happening. Good write. Loved the poem.
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I like the intensity that I see flowing down the page here but if I might make just a minor suggestion here… it would appears to me that it would perhaps improve your work a great deal if you were to tighten the lines a little. This is usually accomplished by tossing out any unnecessary words and shortening the lines. You have a thoughtful poem here and I really enjoyed it immensely I am thinking perhaps it just needs a wee bit tweaking is all.
♥ Touchof1der
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I thought it was very intense and attention grabbing from the start. Nice dark write. YOu really took us for the journey.
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Very dark and gripping!!
i love this, you take the reader to hell and we can feel the flmes,
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woah...thats like awesome dude...it made me all depressed though....its like super awesomely good though..
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Sheesh, if i wasnt depressed before, i sure am now
Such a deep dark full of pain write, Amazing job. This was sod eep, and sent o ut such strong emotions. KEep the pen flowing!
A&F
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wow. such emotion.. bravo!
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