I'm your pretty little [[fuck-up]]
with a shattered toy-heart
I'm not //perfect//,
a painted pcycho,
with nothing to make it :stop:
My pain for >>props<<,
along with silent tears.
Curtains Up: a dreamer :covered with fear:
It all still a f f e c t s me,
this twisted {fake} love
maybe your hate's a fucking sign from above.
I hoped that things would turn out r.i.g.h.t,
but now im left sewing my self t/o/g/e/t/h/e/r, and holding on tight
A few >>slashes<<, a c)u)t.
Those ??spinning?? colors.
Slipping away from reality,
just because you l-o-v-e her.
Your my >>frozen<< blanket of loathe and hate
A layer of concrete impossible to e.s.c.a.p.e
Follow the dotted lines [-------]
straight to i/n/s/a/n/i/t/y
Without ever understanding what happened
or why you n)e)v)e)r cared for me.
Impulses grow >>strong<< as my glows getting dimmer.
Broken dusty soul,
lost from it's [[shimmer]]
Hush the c.o.m.p.l.a.i.n.i.n.g and
Forget all the d/r/e/a/m/s.
Never want you back
as much as it seems.
Author notes
[[Option 8]]
word bank.
A contest entry
- I don't feel right when you're gone away:: Broken-ness. Pain. Emo by SarahEatsAirplane.
340 points, ended May 17, 2007, 45 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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A few >>slashes<<, a c)u)t.
Those ??spinning?? colors.
Slipping away from reality,
just because you l-o-v-e her.
And
Follow the dotted lines [-------]
straight to i/n/s/a/n/i/t/y
Without ever understanding what happened
or why you n)e)v)e)r cared for me.
Are my favorite. This is so powerful and I can relate to it. I'm not big on dirrty pretty but this is really awesome. Good Job.
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WOW...lol its all i can say
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I really love this and can relate. I have felt like this before. This is wonderful. Beautiful job sweetie.
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NeverRegretLove,
Normally I do not like 'dirty pretty' mainly cause it's usually about 'Hollywood sluts' and stuff but this is fantastic.
Great flow and the 'dirty pretty'-ness of it makes it more interesting to read
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Oh... nicely done. That's fucking nice!!=]
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This is really good.
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this was good...a tad bit choppy in some parts but all in all a wonderful poem with a good flow....thank you for adding this to my list
XTashaX -
great
i loved it alot
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Hush the c.o.m.p.l.a.i.n.i.n.g and
Forget all the d/r/e/a/m/s.
Never want you .b a c k.
as much as it seems.
loved these lines, but i have to admit, this poem would be so much more if you got rid of some of the punctuation. theres way too much going on in the poem and following it became a little difficult. but great piece all in all.
Good Luck
♥Chaos -
*smiles faintly* great job taking those words and applying them with your own personal perspective, it speaks aloud. I like this one, it jumps up and speaks to us, we know what your will say, but you say it in Your way. Those dorks we write about.. they are real heartless bastards eh? hehe. Thanks for sharing.
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I enjoyed reading this very much el.
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Ouch!
Lot's of feelings in this one. Love that breaks up is so hard on the one that doesn't fall out of love. We tend to look for what we did wrong, but the fault doesn't lie with us. Sometimes love is not forever. Enjoy it while it's there and look for the next when it's gone. Good luck, The Shaker
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megan...again beautiful my my you are such an amazing poet! its carazyyyyyyyy!!!! lol...good write absolutely love it! keep writing and good luck in the contest dearie!
AnDrEa &hearts
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Wowie Awesome! Good Luck In The Contest, I Hope You Get A Reasonable Place With This, It's A treasure,
Mwah
Luff&&Stuff
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Ohhh darling.
I love this.
Its great, and the rhyme isn't forced at all!
Usually, I don't care for rhyme so much, but you made me really like this one!
good job.
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