why do i cry?
~~~ spit in my eye ~~~
i
earth and water
air, sun and sky
i
^^fire^^
^baring my breast^
i beat a tattoo
mascara~running~black~to~blue
i love you dear mother but
i
am not you
a~squirm~in~my~abdominal~cavity
the unyielding worm of guilt wriggles through my visceral awareness
betraying eurekas
buried in ash and silt
victories murdered
[inwardly]
suffocated triumphs bounced off brick walls
cracked and broken headless dolls
(who cannot speak)
screw you all!
i scream
and scream
and scream
and scream …
convention glaring stonily
retributions are pelted against lead glass
it will pass ...
i promise feathered heartbeats
drumming bone
... it will pass
opposition is fought alone
i face the darkness on my own
identifiable to those who tread the cold depthless waters of individuality
castigated by unforgiving crowds
throwing stones
cretins aching to tie
us uppity bitches down
xxx~mother ~ mother~xxxxx
your grim and womanly wisdoms
are
~ flaking ~
~ ~ ecdysis ~~
f
a
l
l
I
n
g
past
your daughter’s ears
joyfully
i'd rather run
naked
then wear a skin
worn by others
even once
i
am
\\\offspring///
shooting
off
the
#beaten#
path
i
alone
chose my destiny
so convention
:0 kiss my ( ) rosy ass :0
i cry (not so much) because i’m sad
but more so because i’m
^^fucking mad! ^^
Author notes
eureka : exclamation of discovery
http://www.m-w.com/cgi-bin/dictionary?book=Dictionary&va=eureka
ecdysis: ek di sis - shedding skin; outer layer
http://www.m-w.com/cgi-bin/dictionary?book=Dictionary&va=ecdysis
A contest entry
- My 25th contest!!! Picture Inspired....With a Twist... by Shantalina.
800 points, ended May 9, 2007, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I am worth it! (Women only) by Erotic Dreams.
400 points, ended May 14, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Frustrating Anger by torieshawesum.
800 points, ended October 29, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this is a little psychotic and confusing.... WAY TO GO!
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woah, this is somewhat crazy, not really what im looking for with the whole confidence building stuff but i did really really enjoy it, i loved the use of word art, it made it really intruiging and the vocab was really well used, thanks heaps for entering, this was awsome -much love- Zandy
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Good write, I liked the way that the word 'falling' was written in falling letters. Congrats on the Honourable Mention
I liked the use of repetition, for example of the word 'and scream'. I found this poem quite angry and powerful. The imagery here was very dark and powerful. I liked your use of alliteration, for example, 'baring...breast'.
Thanks for your comment
Pozo
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wow...it's quite a different DP poem,
but theres something about it
that draws me in and keeps me there till
the very end.
thank you for following the rules,
you picked a good picture as well...
my favorite one.
you wrote about it very well.
Also thank you for putting the definitions
of the lesser-known words you chose to
use. kudos for using them...
i didn't know what [ecdysis] meant
but now that i do;;
i rather like the word quite a bit.
thanks for entering such a masterpiece!
And good luck to you!
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