A long time ago she sincerely believed
fairy tales were true live story’s
She still can hear these words:
...“Once upon a time”...
She dreamed of a beautiful prince,
taking her away to his castle.
Nobody would ever hurt her in that dream.
...”the shoe of glass fitted her perfectly”...
Brushing her long golden hair
she could see her true love
and it filled her thoughts with happiness
...”Mirror, mirror on the wall”...
She could ease her childish fears
and even smile throughout her sadness
by only looking in the mirror
...”who is the prettiest of all?”...
Growing up painfully fast, confusion
Looking for that everlasting destination
Troubles taking over hand by hand
...”and little bear tasted the porridge”...
Oh, how difficult to stumble forward in live
Attracted by all these temptations
Falling back, alone with her addictions
...”and then the clock sounded midnight”...
Now she is grown up and knows better
And while she looks in the mirror
she thinks of her prince once more
...”Once upon a time”...
Author notes
2. A wacky poem not necessarily inspired by a story. ( inspired by more story's)
4. Prewrites are allowed as a second poem only. ( my new one is almost up...)
6. Have fun !! ( I did...)
7.Please put the title of the story and it’s author in your author notes.
(Once upon a time...by Wolf Mistress)
I'm sorry I didn't follow the rule as no lines from the original should be in it...
but I thought it would fit this contest anyway...
In a list
A contest entry
- My First Picture Contest by Ethereal One.
900 points, ended May 20, 2007, 18 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Mirror Mirror by Ignis Corpus.
500 points, ended August 1, 2007, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Partners In Crime Wacky Fairy Tales and Fables Poetry Contest by Partners In Crime.
1200 points, ended June 4, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Did you believe in fairytales? Once upon a time....
Comments
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A capivating poem, Wolfie. You've used a lot of inagination with this piece. I've enjoyed reading it
I must remind you, however, that the rules state, no lines from the original stories. You have several in this poem. I hope you can enter another one in its place. I'm sorry this one will have to be DQ'd as it wouldn't be fair to other members to allow it to remain in the contest. Sorry
Perhaps you could write a similiar poem but omiting or modifying the lines in question.
Dee
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I hoped you wouldn't see it Dee...
I will see what I can do, not that much time..and the other poem is still waiting too....I will have to figure something out....
Will be back...
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Wow Wolfie, this is brilliant, it's kind of sad that she had to grow and realize that fairy tales are just that and nothing more. Excellent i really enjoyed the read.
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This is a wonderful tale that you have woven with your illustrious pen. I love the imagery that spewed forth as I read each stanza. Fairytales are a part of life and we all hold them within our hearts. Your style and flow were both excellent and the use of this title is splendid. Best wishes in the contest and thank you so much for sharing this one. Kudos for you. Love and God bless you my friend, Joyce
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This is really good. I love how you switch from three lines of real life to one line of a fairy tale that relates. Congrats on the silver, you deserved a trophy!
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Growing up painfully fast, confusion
Looking for that everlasting destination
Troubles taking over hand by hand
...”and little bear tasted the porridge”... loved those lines good job on this poem and i wish you the best of luck in this contes -
I realise you have not been on line much and I do understand we all have lives outside of AP. Now I know you situation I am happy to wait until you get round to marking. Have a great holiday.
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Thanks for your comments on my poem - thank goodness I have poetry to get rid of my frustrations. I thought this poem was so beautiful and so well written. Love the fairy tale, childhood memory stuff and the way you ended each stanza. Very clever and well done.
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excellent~
Love this
I also love the way you used varations from our favorite childhood stories as well...
Congrats on winning the SILVER Trophy
I can see why...I got honorable mention
Nice to meet you as well and do hope you come give mine a read....
Susan~~~
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Thankyou so much for your wonderful comment,
I will come to read yours ASAP
Nice to meet you too,
XXJeannette
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wow
you really wrote this about me?!?!?!?! this is awesome!!! how did you...i mean..what made you....uhm lol what made you think of me when writing this??? it's so...so...TRUE. wow you are such a talented writer, I love it!!!! i love the end of each stanza where you used lines from stories......you are so creative....
much huggs and kisses for this one
xoxoxox
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Thnxs Tash!!!!!!!
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excellent expression
I really love the way you include bits and pieces of the fairy tales we all grew up reading. You tell how as young girls we do believe that we will find our handsome Prince and live Happily Ever After. As we become adults we find out the sad truth.
Very creative write!
Thank you for entering this contest, and good luck!
Aurora 2012
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Thank you soooooooo much for the silver
I am glad you liked it
So did I like this picture contest
Thnxs again
XXJeannette
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