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The Drowning Lover



She wanted to train me
She wanted to be proud of her choice
“I will stand on the other side of sea
Swim and marry me but on time’
I started my swimming across the sea
Love gave me energy to swim
Never got tired never took rest
Sea brought many obstacles in my way
Some times shark tried to eat me away
Some times pushed me back with tides
Time never stopped for me, I was late
The magical energy of love was lost
I started drowning No hope was left
She sent the message “Good Bye”
I couldn’t bear this separation oh her
At once I felt energy of hate within me
I restarted swimming more rapidly
Soon I reached the seashore
Earlier I had lost my first aim She
I was not happy to get second aim Seashore
Now I had lost my energy of hate too
Some vital force is needed to survive
I reentered the sea and started drowning
Desiring death, rebirth, and new sea journey
Or someone might come with new love energy




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What happens when a lover loses both love and hate emotions

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  • delightfulmess silver member
    May 9, 2007

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    Wow, powerful, They must not have loved you as much as you deserved. There is always someone better do not give up

  • PalmettoSky
    May 9, 2007

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    very original take on an otherwise oridinary subject...i liked it. enlightening...thanks for sharing. peace and light, Kendal