They are sitting in the blue eyes
The viewing of the skies
In the ocean of the sea
The beauty on the eyes
The depths of a soul
In gracious words,
we lie in beauties grace
Waiting for the wanting glance
To spill the crimson world descend unto me
This world a new
The crimson light in this shall wait in wanting view
In gracious words,
we lie in beauties glance
The velvet smooth touch upon my skin, it's the feel of a fallen angels touch
Warming the cold upon my face
in the fall from grace
Thrown away from the side of god
Now time will stand still on beauties path
A contest entry
- Quickie ~ Pre-write ~ by blondone.
300 points, ended July 10, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - More than just a pretty face... by aligurl.
625 points, ended February 25, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Oh I really liked this. I loved the last stanza. However, I believe this was the best part...
"we lie in beauties grace
Waiting for the wanting glance
To spill the crimson world descend unto me'
I also really enjoyed how you mixed the beauty with eyes. I was a little befuddled if you were saying all this was in her eyes, or if this is what she sees... but it ws a good poem. Thank you for entering and good luck in my contest.
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I can't see what your prompt was in the other contest what was your prompt and what contest was it in do you rememeber?
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sorry i dont know
an ex girlfriend asked me to write it for her and i did this was the out come and it was pure luk anyone like it i think
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