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Eternal resting

No one no more i cant take it no more
I once were free to move to groove
Now I'm in chains force to do what my enemies want
all they can do is taunt me then abuse me my friends are now becoming my enemies

they sided with them and i got no where to go

 

Now they want me to take medicines for this is making me more weaker for them to control

Not to me but FOR OTHER people but the love from back then had faded and been haunting us

We cut to release some of our pressure

we shoot ourselves to end the torture

Or take sleeping pills to go asleep and never wake back up again Right now i want to go to asleep and never wake back up

Please PLease PLEase PLEAse PLEASe PLEASE let me go to sleep and never wake up

 

 

 

I

WANT

TO

DIE

RIGHT

NOW

SO

DON'T

HOLD

BACK

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  • Darkened eyes
    May 23, 2007

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    This is a great poem and flows really well, it has such a unique format to, which is great, the repetition of never wanting to wake up also gives a very powerful message and shows the pain, a great write.


  • illegalfairy
    May 22, 2007

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    first off sorry it took so long for me to get around to commenting. I really liked this poem. i just have had so little time to be online.
    I really liked how this flowed. it was wonderful. its so sad and just describes the desire to die so well. NO one should have to feel like dying is the best way to end the pain but you described the longing for it so well. This was really good. Thank you for entering it into the contest. Great job. ^^


  • Lost Fate
    May 10, 2007

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    Well. Powerful piece. I can relate to this, so it would be horribly hypocritical of me to say what everyone else has commented about. I've tried suicide myself more times than I care to count( i've actually lost count). But I'm trying...and even though shit happens, and you want to die so bad, just don't...It'll get better... Eventually. Great job


  • NeverRegretLove
    May 9, 2007

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    wow. i msorry that you feel this way. but death isnt the answer i swear. nice poem tho. and keep it up. good luck
    M.e.g.a.n


  • Trixie08
    May 9, 2007

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    Trust me that's a route you don't want to go take it from someone who knows. Your piece is good and it expresses this longing and pain that can't be healed. But, your scaring your friend Kyo here and she worries for you. Apart from that there are far less things worst than death itself but, please don't even consider ending your own life because there are alot of people including me that don't want to see you go.


  • kyo kurai kori
    May 9, 2007

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    *looks at him sad* dark im slightly afraid right now i love how much emotion you put into this peice but at the same time im scared for what you realy want from this it makes me ask "do you realy wana die and throw away your life over how you feel?" well don't cause you have one friend here that is and will be always by your side and never let you go!

    love, kyo kurai kori

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