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Three Times Dead

and yet I breath....





Death from depression
a dreamer's disease
that muddles the mind
and weakens the knees
A type of dementia
that starts in the head
and kills long before
the victim is dead



Death from the boredom
the endless routine
that leaves a man restless
and hungry and mean
A type of starvation
that makes you grow old
and kills long before
the body is cold



Death from the conscience
a fatal embrace
that knifes in the back
then smiles to the face
A type of affliction
that torments the soul
and kills long before
the years take their toll

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  • psychomonkey
    February 25

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    wow i like the subject that you chose to write about, its something that i have struggled with for most of my life. you did a great job and expressing what it is to you. thank you for entering


  • Oleander
    December 2, 2008
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    ooooh ....speechless.


  • Forgotten Anomaly
    October 27, 2008
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    Ah, so so true this is. Depression is a horrible thing, I know its been eating me for the last five years and shows no sign of letting me out of its grip. Seems like it haunts alot of writers (poets or otherwise). Very nicely done. Thank you for entering my contest.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    October 15, 2007
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    Very deep and so true. Depression is a hard way in life and feeds so deep it often leaves on feeling dead or wish so. I know this feeling all to well. You did an excellent job explaining the feelings and distruction of it to a soul.
    Thank you for entering.
    Love


  • Grey Mouser
    October 14, 2007

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    A strong declaration of the affliction of mind that take sit's toll and leaves one empty, unable and unwilling to seek redemption.
    Thank you for entering into the contest.
    Be well and be blessed,
    Mouser


  • Dark Whispers
    August 28, 2007

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    Wow, thats some powerful poetry, you always write amazing poem, and I would expect less, great write
    ~Dark


  • SandraMVeinot
    June 6, 2007
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    'Three Times Dead'...

    One would never know that you we'er at all or ever depressed by your words/ work...
    and always light showing through the seams...
    catching glimpse here and there is the main thing..

    and thank you again for lrtting me read these thine wonderful writes upin these pages of air born windows of the internet....

    thank you again...


  • Darkened eyes
    May 18, 2007

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    This describes really well the idea of dreprssion, this is expertly written and has an excellent rhythm. i especially like the idea of the'dreamers disease'
    xX


  • DareU2Byourself
    May 16, 2007

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    My goodness. I feel like this was written about me. I am SUCH a dreamer! I fight the dreamer's death by holding the hope that someday, perhaps it will be possible, a dream may come true. Thank you so much for sharing this.


  • Catsy91
    May 10, 2007
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    Marvelous and Truthful

    I love it. *claps... a lot* great flow and ryhmes. All I have to say besides that is amazing.

  • Pale Lady
    May 10, 2007

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    This is truely amazing. i love the flow of the poem and how each stanza relates, but still has their own strenght. Your work is brilliant.


  • Death of the Author
    May 9, 2007

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    Wow, wow, wow, absolutely stunningly sadly brilliantly amazingly fantastic write...I love the way each stanza ties together and as always it is absolutely perfect in rhyme and flow. Well done, I think...if I remember rightly...this is your 100th poem on Allpoetry...so well done...if not I have just made a bit of a fool out of myself! x Take Care and keep it up, I'll always keep reading!! x


  • Never Fall in Love
    May 9, 2007

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    Death from the conscience
    a fatal embrace
    that knifes in the back
    then smiles to the face

     

    This is AMAZING

    It just reminded me of something

    Yesterday, I told everyone I was going to die three times

    lol .. cuz I had my dutch exams ... (they're fatal) and I have three papers for it

    So basically, you die, sleep for a while, awake, die again, sleep, awake, do other exams, die one more time, no sleep, and continue exams :D

     

    I hate dutch

    anyway .. this is excellent

    Keep it up :F

     

    NeveR ♥

     

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