Is the concept of me just a fable?
I am lost, my search has been brutal
Maybe I should confide in a label
Because sometimes my life seems so futile
They seem happy anyway without truth,
Is my "identity" even real?
Some say the phase will pass with my youth,
So should I just adopt a strange ideal?
Something inside me screams ruthlessly NO!
That I would rather die than be a sham
Even though I am lost, soon I will know
What and who it is that I really am
Author notes
sometimes how i feel
A contest entry
- Inspiration!!! by Talia.
475 points, ended May 17, 2007, 14 entries
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i love this so much.
i love how the first stanza rhymes
it just idk i really like it haha.
great write -
Well I am still searching and I am 27 lol I guess it comes to us all in time, the road we must travel.
Good luck inthe contest -
I love your rhymes (brutal, futile). I quite enjoyed the message behind the poem as well, it is easier to pretend sometimes. I would work a little on the flow, reading the poem out loud usually works with that, and I'd put NO! between brackets, but that's just personal taste. Nice poem!
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nice
short and sweet. I like it. it seemed as if it degenerated to a rant in the last stanza, which could be improved, but I like the subject and how you presented it. Well done.
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