Seasons of midnights
worn in ebony frayed threads
upon the garment used as one's mental pajamas.
Suddenly no longer fitting so well,
growing uncomfortable
with the perennial scratchy feeling
that irritates the senses
and leaves one feeling
the world is a cage
filled with spiders and demons.
Walking out into the sunshine with new eyes
finally allowing them to touch the majesty
where only shadows prevailed in one's passion crevices.
Seeing the rebirth of inner luster,
a genesis of soul produces light's tales in promise,
at last inhaling serenity's purest balm
lacking the toxic waste of nocturnal flagellations
with a melancholy whip for self-inflicted stripes.
Letting the calm and silent splendor
become a music soothing and refreshing,
feeling at last a blissful revival of spellbound awe,
giving a reason to keep on breathing
where the lungs
no longer event excuses to scream.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Hope,Dark,Love,refreshing by gone4years.
550 points, ended May 14, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Celebrating 150 by intanglio2ring.
750 points, ended May 23, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - My point of view on life sucks. Let's re-define it. by Eyes Wide Shut.
650 points, ended June 17, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice...
Masterful use of metaphor and smooth flow; an enviable write indeed.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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This is such a beautiful piece of imaginary. thank you for entering. And good luck!
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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good job!!! good luck in the contest!
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Thank you for the wonderful comment.
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Oh My Gosh!
Okay - I think I might know who you are!
Now here's my take: A guy with thread bare pajamas giving him a wedgie, then he lets one go creating an odorous relief to his system and leaving a trace behind, all while in the bliss of sleep!
Whew! (holds nose) I survived - and this is incredible!
Thanks for your rendering of poetic devices!
Good Luck in my contest!
Tang
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Darn it Tang, how come you have to be so smart. I mean here I did my best to disguise myself and you saw me right off. Good slant on the view too. Thanks for the great comment.
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gratz on gold, brilliant write here so well deserving of the golden shiny.
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Thank you for the congratulations and comment.
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Wonderfully Written!
The first stanza was amazing. I like the mental pajamas and the world is a cage part as well. You have definitely capitivated the audience and I am sure the contest holder knows that as well. Good luck.
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Thank you for the great comment.
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Wow!!
Powerful Journey You take the reader on and I felt
as if going from one to another like a transition
but it felt good...
for I imagine there are others who could relate and
have gone through that type of change~
Metamorphosis if You will...
Thank You for sharing Your Talent Sweetness
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and my Love
~ Desire~*~
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Thank you precious. Glad you enjoyed the journey. Always thrilled when we share it.
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wow...thats all i have to say...wow
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Thank you for your kind words.
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I am in LOVE with this poem--especially the first and third stanzas. Good luck and good writing.
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Thank you so much for your wonderful comment.
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