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The Things I'd Do For You

Stroke your hair
Dry your tears
Take away your doubts and fears

Be your hero
Be your knight
Be you everlasting light

Kiss your lips
In front of friends
Walk with you until the end

Look at you
When you speak
Kiss your forehead and your cheek

Hold your hand
All the time
Fill your head with thoughts sublime

Kiss you in
The pouring rain
Be there just to entertain

Let you know
How much you mean
Tell you all my crazy dreams

Hang out with you
When your sad
Kiss you when you're getting mad

Let you mess
With my hair
When you need me, I'll be there

Let you take
Your photographs
Look at them with you and laugh

Let you sleep
In my arms
Keep you safe from any harm

Tell you what
I'm thinking of
Tell you when I fall in love

Author notes

Inspired by a list of ways to sweep a girl off her feet I found on someone's page(if only I could remember whose). It does rhyme, I know, but I've never been very good with free verse. This poem means something to me, personally, so I hope you like it, but I won't cry if you don't.

Option 1 in the contest "INSPIRE ME"

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Sesheta
    July 15, 2008

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    Beautiful and very touching! I sigh with longing at every line. It sounds good, it reads well, and it speaks true. I love this poem! It takes that list to a whole new level!


  • xSweetDreamsx
    October 8, 2007

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    Another beautiful poem...you really have a way with words... you have a gift... you do.....anyway keep up the outstanding writing, if only all men think like you do!

  • hazydreams
    July 13, 2007
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    Very well written. Love the poem.


  • Floorboards
    May 29, 2007

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    very good

    this is really good, i love the short punchy stanzas, very well done and thank you for entering my contest,
    floorboards.


  • ibsons hysops
    May 28, 2007
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    You R Completely In The Finalist's Chair!!!!


  • Dark Whispers
    May 26, 2007

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    this poem is wonderful, I don't even know how to express how much Ilove this poem I just *sighs*.
    Great rhyme. thanks for entering


  • Florida Sunshine
    May 21, 2007
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    Clearly this is gold~

    This is a great poem~ and clearly gold~ Way to go!!!


  • Makemebeauty
    May 17, 2007

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    This flows really well, I suppose thats because of the rhymes. But it's works really well.
    Careful though:
    "Let you take
    Your photographs
    Look at them with you and laugh"
    This throws it off a little bit, only because it doesnt have the same sort of rhyming beat as the rest.
    But all is good.


  • Glass Heart
    May 13, 2007

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    Aww. I love it. It's so cute and romantic and... sugary sweet. I love it! Pleasant write. Congratulations, you are on the finalists list.

  • AmaryllisNightshade
    May 13, 2007
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    Aw, so sweet and lovely and petite (:


  • WriteOrWrong597
    May 11, 2007

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    You are one of my favorite poets on this site, without a doubt. I love this piece, as I love all others. The rhyme was good. It seemed a little off at times, but that added to the story. Plus, having it a little off makes it a lot better than really forcing it. Good luck in the contest.


  • MetalHouse III
    May 9, 2007
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    very nice. good luck


  • Shantalina
    May 9, 2007

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    This has probably got to be the cutest, sweetest poem I have ever read written by a male hand. lol. It's beautiful, and romantic in an innocent way, and it's everything that would make a girl happy. I don't usually applaud poems in my contests, but have some clappy dudes for a job magnificently done! Thanks for entering, and best of luck to you!

    Xx


  • SyntheticVagary
    May 9, 2007

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    This was a very good piece. I really did enjoy it. It gave me a new outlook on poetry because normally mine are much longer. I didn't think it was possible to capture something so perfectly without going into more detail. However this, was absolutely perfect. No more explaination needed Great read, I will have to add you to my favorites.

    -Syn


  • Porcelain Princess
    May 9, 2007

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    Aw, this is a sweet little write. I can see how it was inspired by one of those lists, and you did a lovely job portraying that list. Great work.

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