Underneath her skin, it dwells
A creature so vile, but no one can tell
She’s make it leave if she had the choice
So sick of constantly hearing it’s voice
She look for the pieces of trust that it stole
But they vanish in air when it takes control
It’s like endless nightmares and bad acid trips
A beast with more rage than the Bloods and the Crips
And when some of her sanity seems to rebuild,
In a moment the world she gets back may be killed
It’s tactics are sadistically seductive
It says it’s her friend until it gets destructive
And I wish I could drain it out of her
Reduce it’s existence to only a blur
Silence the monster from screaming in her
And make her believe that she isn’t a sinner
It attempts to make her reality hell
It could get her locked up in a prison cell
I can imagine her trial, a frightening case
I cannot see anyone else in her place
In her shoes, they’d quit life for all that it’s worth
They’d just turn and run for the ends of the earth
They could never stand the title
Of being labeled “homicidal”
She might scare herself and thinks that she’s wrong
But the fact that she’s standing proves that she’s strong
And from it’s voice, she won’t ever be saved
Still, she rolls on ‘cause she’s desperately brave
It picks up normality, tearing a hole
Destroying the outside, but never her soul
The most dangerous life you could possibly lead
Has been blinded by courage and will to proceed
How I wish I could drain it out of her
So the tone of it’s voice would be only a blur
Silence the monster that rages in her
Hallucination is the real sinner
Author notes
Late January, 2007.... I wrote this poem awhile ago, but just now decided to put it on this site. The story behind this poem:
I went to the psychward and met this amazing girl... She could always make me smile and she was really pretty... I thought it was horrible when I found out what her problems were, because she goes through so much shit that she doesn't deserve... But I also admired her a lot. I compared her to myself, and I thought "well if she can get through all her shit like she does, I can get better too"... And I did.
She's the most emotionally strong person I know, and after I wrote this, I realized I loved her. We've been together for a very long time now.
To explain the title:
"tonetic" is a word referring to the sounds of the human language. It is misspelled because it is an anagram.
If you re-arrange the letters, it spells "Tric is innocent"
For the contest:
2- Schizophrenia
A contest entry
- Blow me out of the water by Soul Reaper -Crow-.
450 points, ended June 18, 2007, 13 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Several Options.... by Mojave Moon.
600 points, ended February 6, 6 entries
Honorable winner
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Please tell me what you think
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I fell in love with the deepness of this! It was very captivating in a sadistic way! Loved it very much!!
Thanks for entering and good luck!
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wow, very inspiring, love how you were able to fall in love with someone going through so much mentally... most get scarred and run off... most are selfish and don't want to deal with that, I think that is awesome you were able to see her strength in all this... where most people think it's a weakness...
I really enjoyed this =) I am very intruiged with the mind, I think most of us really underestimate the power of it...
thanks for entering my contest and sharing such a personal part of you...
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I thought this was very inspirational... It was real about a real person and it also was supportive. I'd hate to be able to hear voices and feel so hateful towards myself, me myself and I don't like each other enough already, so I couldn't and wouldn't like to imagine this. I am glad you two are together, I hope you keep each other strong and emotional adept. Thanks for sharing your story, it's real and it speaks of how much confidence you have in her.
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Thank you for sharing your poetry in this contest; I wish you all the very best
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Thank you for entering this contest. I appreciate the time, effort and emotion that put into your poetry. Judging this contest proved challenging since there were so many wonderful entries.
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Super job on this write. Good use of words, nice format and rhyming. Le travail merveilleux. Good luck.
~Oka/KC
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