Why not something new,
why not leave the hurt behind,
and leave a wish within the well?
Why not?
Gathering my quill and paper
I journeyed through the night,
I braved the jagged ice,
I traveled across the falling snow,
and chanced the rivers flow,
just to gain that pleasant well
out of reach of wind and rain and snow
I dropped my penny in,
and watched it fall away
a copper spark in the cold depths
holding all my thoughts for you.
Why not?
why not drop a coin
into those happy depths,
why not send a wish
across the heaving sea?
why not leave the hurt behind,
just to see what you might find.
I am sitting under the arbor
on the old stone bench,
curled up with my pens and such,
scribbling down my secret thoughts,
waiting for you to come down the path
in the breaking dawn,
a long gown trailing in the dew,
your hair pulled to the side
because you knew I'd be here
writing about you
beside your misty well
at home in the wistful dawn.
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Written July 26th, 2003
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why not indeed...
no need to fear...
lets just go
cus you will catch me
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more please
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Something very right about this. I find that I personally spend a lot of time dwelling in the past, remembering times when I was very happy, and thought nothing could go wrong (and of course it almost always does). This is a nice reminder to look forward and not back...besides, all that backward glancing could leave me walking into walls and such ..
painful.
I like this.
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This was beautiful..It was soft and loving..Very enjoyable read.
Great work.
Soulful Woman -
this was a great poem. the wishing well perfected this piece...but i guess thats what you intended. i love wishing wells so i was drawn to your poem. very nice!
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this is a great poem, it's written really well, great job :]
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A Blazing Star & great poet
Awesome poem, the words are totally amazing. You showed the side of wonderment, in the male. You show me men have wishes, beautiful wishes in the form of the lovely dear female...Your talent is enchanting...write ON!...ennovy
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oh the magic of a wishing well. you can always toss your troubles, hopes, and dreams down a well. i love this piece it was very well written. keep that pen flowing and i will be sure to read.
†Justin† -
Wow there was so much great imagery here..it was great!! And wow i could definitely feel the love
i really, really enjoyed reading this poem..great job
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not this. but i had to stop and read.
spend my last clap.
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What a hopeful piece. This flows well...it seems that this piece is going somewhere ... or coming from somewhere - like there is more to be told. Good write!
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Wish I had the same emotion when i dropped a coin in the wishing well, nice to see a beautiful thought on his subject.
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People are interested in wishing wells, and I am no exception. Liked the way you wrote this, really much more than a simple tale about a wishing well. GOod write.
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awesome poem
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There is so much hope in this and longing as well. I can see this as not just a dream but life holding it's breath. Somewhere there is a place exactly like the one you described.
This had a very soft and gentle flow that fits perfectly. Happy writting -
Good read
Awsome!
I realy like your style in this write.
The imagery is beautiful. The flow is smoothe and the form is great. Good write -
This was a wonderful poem. I loved how in some places it rhymed and in others it didn't, that threw a nice swing into it. I also love how it's about a wishing well, I've loved wishing wells my whole life. It's kinda like they're magical and mysterious. Thank you soooo much for sharing, this was wonderful!
~Mystic -
Hey, L-Man...i found this one on the back page of the
featured section whilst i was rummaging around in the
poems there being a point whore...lol
You know, this is the first time i have read old Lute
in a very long time...now i remember what it was i
liked about your stuff way back when i first started
reading you...
your writing has evolved and changed over time...and yeah,
i still like it...
but i read this one tonight and think...oh man...come
back, Lute! give me more of THIS!
UB
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Your an old timey romantic which is hard to find! I loved the way you described things in such a detailed way that you could feel it comeing alive right in front of you! the ending lacked a bit i expected something more dramatic to happen but still good anyway keep up the good work love ya chelle
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so well written!.. it's loveley.. so decriptive and melodic..
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Great poem. I love it, It was short and sweet. Please keep writing and keep up the good work. You are an amazing writer.
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This, to me, sounds like the beginning of a very long piece, or the ending of a very long piece. Either way, this can touch on more than what it is, tho, as is, it is just as nice.
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A penny for your thoughts. One day the girl will walk down the path towards you. and you are doing the right thing I think sitting and waiting, Patience is a virtue and it shall pay off. Beautiful poem
Lakota x -
hi lute...
this is beautiful, .... -
deep breath
Beautiful. I can say no more.
Keep Feelin' Fascination,
~Tiffany~ -
Wonderful imagery, I can picture now her walking towards you. Hope someday she really does come walking towards you knowing you were there waiting for her because "To love and to be love is the greatest gift of all"
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wonderful piece...and i agree, why not? society is just too cynical these days. i loved the last stanza...the image of the wish and waiting for it to come true. very bittersweet
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This is Beautifully written.
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A beautiful romantic write. Very vivid, and again very atmospheric. Full of innocent hopes, wistful longings. Very sweet with smooth flow- and I liked the structure. The questions to open with, reveal the go-getter insight into the character. Lovely.
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A beautifully penned, descriptive poem. Here goes my coin into the well for your health and happiness and may all your wishes come true. Hugs, Irene
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Sweetly done. From what I read here, sometimes wishes come true.~~~Val
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