I lay here with thoughts of you
embracing my core
I can still feel your fingers as they gently
touched my body, reaching all the places
you know would bring me pleasure
In turn giving you the same
The scent of us filling the room
arousing my senses
My mind racing with fevered thoughts
as I try to reach you with my mind
feeling sensations that need to be satisfied
Once more the flame grows
passion overtaking me
Sensuality coating my body
My hands retracing yours
trembling with lust and desire
The world slips away
As I scream your name
In a list
A contest entry
- Subtle erotica tastefully written by Naridill.
650 points, ended May 17, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Love that line...where did YOU come up with that>>>." Sensuality coating my body..." splendid...I can hear ya screaming all the way here...keep it down, would ya please..Seriously, very good job ! Steamy, sizzling, sensual but classy!
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"Once more the flame grows" A simple statement like this carries a lot of beauty to me. Your last line does sum things up while changing your tone.
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You can scream my name anytime.
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Shower Time
A very arousing write I must say, but then check out who wrote it... I thank you for sharing it with me my friend and I wish you the best in your challenge...
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yes,yes,yes,
memories of those times I have shared. lovely description and write, flows sweetly across the page, leaving us enchamnted and under your spell.
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EROTIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is another example of why Soulful Woman is a Poet, she writes/feels hers and everyones thoughts and desires. A more beautiful and Human woman does not exist anywhere.
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Wow! This is absolutly wonderful! You have me tingling all over. I think I'll just end this comment and read it a few more times.
Love,
Amera
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Nicely done, lots of imagery. I like the flow and found it very interesting to read. I feel the last line is out of place, but not sure if I need to re-read, so I will.
Thanks for entry!!
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Not too loud. We're trying to keep this a secret. Yell, "Oh, mighty stud." or something. That will have the same effect for you and me but keep the neighbors guessing... naw... they'd know that was me, too. Three bunnies for this, and a hug
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Excellent x2
Sensuality coating my body
My hands retracing yours
trembling with lust and desire
The world slips away
As I scream your name
Perhaps one of the best I have read from you in sensuality
Soft and embracing, my favorite
Rick
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This is very tastefully done... delightfully passionate in content... imagery. Great poem. Well done... good luck in the contest you have entered
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i would love to be in your head when you dream...the poor dream catchers must be overloaded with your vast imagery well done to you on this its utterly amazing xxxx
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Very sexy, seductive, and so very tastefully erotic
This gets the senses stirring without the "in your face" aspect and I admire that
Well done, poetess; all the best to you in this contest
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