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Me, myself and i

Lustful delights, inspired by the patter of a heart

Alluring herself into a state of indulgence

Unaware of the dramatic effect, she

Resurrects your delinquent soul

Assuming responsibility for your erotic nature

 

Caressing your thoughts

Obeying your demands

Offering you a spice, that burns eternally

Pardoning your past transgressions

Evicting the scent of purity, she

Releases your soul.

 

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  • poetology2008
    January 23, 2008
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    asertive yet evasive,


  • Godless But Divine gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    She blossoms with light
    Lustful and delight
    Reddish her flesh is
    While her conscience start to fizz
    Pleasure she gives, without a thing in return
    She uttered her soul delight to the fire she burns..

  • davidwright silver member
    January 10, 2008
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    Very nice, the subleties of eroticism. Well written. Happy trails


  • Tercil gold member
    January 7, 2008
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    An exotic mouth watering piece, the senses have come alive to.


  • penman gold member
    December 31, 2007
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    Excellent

    What a terrific acrostic. You do know how to make them burn.


  • raggyann
    December 30, 2007
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    yes i agee teasing is the rightwords used for this poem
    but you wrote it so well


  • sidewinder silver member
    December 29, 2007

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    erotic... yet teasing within that romantic sense where a twinkle within one's eye makeone smile and heart go pitter, patter!

    Yes this did make me smile!

    keep penning on one stoke at a time!
    Bill


  • sassylibra0074
    December 28, 2007
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    very well done


  • tlsledge
    November 30, 2007
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    Interesting wordplay. Good job.


  • Grateful
    November 24, 2007

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    i can see the elegance of passion in your poem. "Offering you a spice, that burns eternally" beautiful line. you realy know how to capture the essence of your pure emotions.
    all the best - sukhdarshan


  • macandrew
    November 19, 2007

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    Wonderfully penned acrostic.
    My favorite: Evicting the scent of purity

    well done.
    John


  • green20goblin
    October 15, 2007
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    thats a very good poem,you are really talented,keep up the good work


  • Kram
    October 8, 2007

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    its good

    I like it but not the photograph,but the picture your words creat.....

    I mean I like the words written more than the photo
    ie even if the photo is not here the magical lines are able to influence the reader..that is what i meant.


    • PassionsPromise gold member
      October 8, 2007
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      Dear poet, this indeed was an EXCELLENT write written about a beautiful lady. Her words create a wonderful picture of whom she is, a carefree, passionate, sincere and loving woman. The picture adds to the BEAUTY of whom she is. Creates a wonderous thought of how care free one can be, one who is in tune with herself, loves herself, as others love her. Now, if you didnt like the picture FRIEND, then you should of said nothing for no words needed to be said. I find that you had been rude within your comment. INSULTING to be the truth I would say fits better. The comment could of very well been left as "Your words created.... what?? Couldnt even finish that thought?? Maybe you did enjoy the picture a little more then you thought, that your thoughts couldnt be finished. hmm. Maybe.
      Anyhow. I would appreciate it if you would apologize for this comment and edit it or remove it.
      At least she deserves that respect by you.

      Tory
      Screename here: PassionsPromise
      Please do not submit reply to her you can go direct to me, for this comment was of my own doing, and in response to what i feel was a rude comment.


  • I will stand by you
    October 5, 2007
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    this is a good write keep it up.


  • Tecolote
    October 3, 2007
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    cute


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    September 11, 2007

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    Stunning

    Superb writing here. I love this. Brilliant imagery and the emotion is stunning in this. Well done for this great piece of writing.

    All the best
    Wayne


  • narrocks
    September 10, 2007
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    good one


  • Darkened Seraph
    September 8, 2007

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    lol a very good use of your name in this arrostotic formatt i like the imagery you created within this making you sound like a very kinky woman lol no wonder how i appeared in the world lol sorry i'll behave please dont put me on the stairs again

  • Seeking Peace silver member
    September 8, 2007

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    Well this is a wonderful way of looking at yourself, I love this piece, so well written

    Karen

  • jamesmike99
    August 19, 2007

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    wow you have a way with words...it was fun to read that
    but its an excellent write...keep up the great work


  • Shadow Lynx
    July 15, 2007

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    A natural talent you have for bringing out emotions in writing,this was a delight to read.I didnt notice until i read it the second time that it was an acrostic which i think is a tribute to how good it is as sometimes acrostics come across as a lil forced but this read beautifully


  • Airborne Ed silver member
    July 8, 2007

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    Oh I love your poem. Written is your unique style and your erotic grace. You really take the reader for a wonderful ride.... I love acrostic poems in general but this one... is amazing, just like you...


  • Jarrod
    July 6, 2007
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    nice acoustic, a hard technique to master but you have done a pretty good job!!


  • badfate
    July 3, 2007

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    Is this YOU !

    The way you make me feel,
    so alive,
    so wonderful,
    so real.

    Caressing my thoughts.


  • Deliverance
    June 28, 2007

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    Innocently read this

    Having read yours before
    And liked
    Them
    Even the freeverse ones

    Anyway,
    Can I be honest?
    Right then I will. This is the
    Only acrostic I can
    Stomach
    That's only because you wrote
    It!
    Congratulations!
    Sort of good.


  • FightOffYourDemons
    June 23, 2007

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    Love the diction.
    You used a lot of catchy powerful words.
    Good write.
    Thanks
    Nikki

  • Airborne Ed silver member
    June 10, 2007
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    An erotic tenderness flows so beautifully from your inner soul to your paper. This is so beautiful written that you can feel a soft whisper begging you to be appart of your poem. And I can invision all the passion and desire surround me within this poem. It really is a tribute to the heartfelt skills you possess to write something like this.

    I wish you the best of luck in the contest you entered.


  • dixiebme
    June 9, 2007
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    My husband would like the picture. Good write. Good luck in this contest.


  • capricornpoet
    May 28, 2007

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    demon girl

    Whimsical in the nature of seductress,capturing the eyes and demons within men, for a little time, a little sin,

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