At night I lie in bed dreaming of you,
The time slips by but my thoughts remain still,
You are everything to me, you are my world.
As I lie motionless in my room, I watch the clock,
wishing it to speed on,
Concentrating on the time that I can see you again.
My thoughts hold me like a prisoner,
Every muscle in my body aches to break out and race
through the night to hold you.
I want to creep into your room and watch you sleep.
To see your hair gently falling over your face,
Your mouth slightly parted, twitching at the sides,
as you dream.
I dare to believe that those thoughts are of me….
It's still only 1 am and my heart is racing at the
thought of the first time I see you,
Seeing your eyes, your neck, the curve in your back
as your top holds to it for a moment.
These small things keep me going, keep me breathing.
Without them, there is no point.
As the sun rises, so the smouldering flames in my
heart begin to reignite,
Bursting with energy, my mind races, thinking of all
the things that we could do together this day,
The ideas are unceasing, call in sick, throw in my
job, anything to spend an extra moment with you,
To hold you longer, to kiss you longer, to smell the
sweet fragrance of your body, just for one more
millisecond.
Finally, that moment comes, the night's torture is
left long behind,
The tiredness becomes irrelevant, because I see you……,
Have you been thinking of me, is your body tingling
the way mine is?
As we walk towards each other, all the words from the
night before fly through my head,
What do I say, which do I pick?
Everything else seems to move in slow motion as the
feelings bombard me,
I dodge around them trying to see clearly, to grasp
on to the time I have waited for,
As we pass, you start to look up, my hopes rise, my
body wants to scream, but then..
Your eyes fall back down and you pass by without
saying a word.
A contest entry
- Let It All Out by BeautifulDisaster9.
525 points, ended May 10, 2007, 21 entries
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Yet another love one... starting to irk me. (Irk is a fun word... should use it more often.)
Crushing on someone is great fun, except for the part when they don't catch on. Then it just comes crashing down on you and then you're left wondering what there is left for you to do in life. Major suckatoodyness, in my opinion. You had a fine way of expressing someone's feelings for another, but then that person must've been very tired the next day after his crush walked by without a word or smile from that lack of sleep.
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hmm...it says i didn't leave a comment. but i did. anyway. nice poem. there.
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Good job, this actually describes almost exactly something that happened to me. Thank for an excellent entry and a job very well done!!!!! KEEP UP THE AMAZING WORK!!!!!!!
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Oh no
This is so very sad! You have penned feelings of despair at the end with so few words. I think I felt this because you built your poem with such emotion that when the end came It was like a slap in the face.
All the best to you with this.
Gaylene
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awww this is romantic. so sensual and yet...so mysterious....and...sad... nice piece. wonderful work and imagery and all that jazz.
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AMAZING!
this is sweet, romantic and everything in between. i love it. good luck in the contest! -
Wow.
Beautifully written. I loved it, the end really got me. I didnt quite expect it, to be honest. Well done, and again a very delicately written heart grasping poem.
Best of luck and thanks for entering.
<3BeautifulDisaster9
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