This one is going to hurt
oh, breakups were nothing new
these feelings were new.
The woman he could not resist;
one that made him feel deeply.
She made him cry, she sent him a
suicide note. He read the note and he felt pain.
She called to cash in on her cruel joke;
he couldn’t talk.
[Relief and tears.]
The second time she made him cry was over the kids
in Africa, she wrote what she felt:
“I have looked into the eyes of a starving child
and the mother brought so low by famine and thirst
that she cannot make milk to save her baby…or tears to mourn”
That was the day he fell in love with this amazing woman;
it was the beauty of her soul.
She inspired him to act.
[and joy]
She brought undeniable beauty into his world.
She wants a relationship;
he just wants her.
He wants to tell her he loves her in quiet ways;
a new way every day.
So that every day is the first time he says “I love you”.
This one is going to hurt. He put on his hat, and shades [his eyes].
Author notes
Option 3. something about eyes
A contest entry
- I wan't to get lost in your eyes by shattered logic.
440 points, ended May 13, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wow very well written,
The flow is great, the word choice is also good, this was full of emotions;it had love but it was also sad and it was very powerful well done and good luck!!!! -
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i liked this poem it had alot of emotions in it that makes it a very good poem. -
Lovely Words
Hello, You have penned a wonderful poem. So beautiful. Thank you for sharing Pete. Best of luck in the contest. Sounds like a winner to me. You take care, Sandy
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I am speechless...
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Romantic & Sad
awesome concept of life,about love and the famine in the world. It's so easy to love one with a heart so pure, and just seeing the pain through her eyes. Heartfelt words of excellence....novy
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Hey, can I get you to please put your option number in your author comment box please and thanks!!!
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