Say The Tippy-tops
Climb all over me
With your eyes thoughts feet
I bear you no malice
Though deep within my heart is fire
I am foundated upon changes wrought by time
And time doth both erase and paint over its erasures – continually
My demeanor is docile
You are welcome
My skin is slick
Upon it my highways are steep
Clouds observe me
And drop upon me
Their minuscule white or splattering bombs
Which I tightly package
And send sliding down to Recycling
From whence one day
They will return
Although your trimmings and borings annoy
You do not scare or threaten me – yet
You are made of me
Though you diminish my beauty
As you do all beauty
You extract my sinew to facilitate your obliterations
Though you see otherwise
Though you see, you cannot see unwise
I will exist long after you have completed your existence
When the very last bit of me melts into plain
I will still have tentacles that will stretch out into all that is
When the sun flicks its light switch off
When the airs race out into infinity
It is then Tranquility is to be crowned King
For it is I who will remain and reign… until happenings
Beyond even my imaginings, transpire
Author notes
Songs Quotes - "This is the end of the world" - Muse
A contest entry
- GIVE ME SOMETHING TO PONDER by Swan song.
1000 points, ended March 22, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Land (The EPCOT Invitational) by Brendan Newcomb.
500 points, ended July 26, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Brilliantly Thought-provoking...
Thank you for your entry in my contest, and Congratulations on all your shiny trophies!! 
Wishing you all the best!! Peace always, xx Cyn 
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There is a lot to think about with this poem and it is very well done. I will admit that it is also a bit more complex than I expected based on the prompt as Li Po has a simplicity that leaves a vivid interpretation that I was hoping to see more of throughout these entries.
Really though, it's a great piece of writing. I can see why this has won previous trophies.
Kim
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*Gasp* actually goes along with the prompt, written in first person! Don't think anybody else caught on to that but yes. Thank you for entering, i love the words you used in this, the tone and style. GL
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pretty good
i liked your word usage and how it portrayed the basics of what the prompt represented
thanks for entering and best of luck -
Sort of like a flip-side to Silverstein's The Giving Tree, except that this character is more certain of its place, has seen more, has no allegiance to these temporary creatures that crawl on it. I hope we are made of more than the point of view believe, but there are questioning times...
The last stanza is brief and bold, open to imagination and interpretation.
Thanks for your entry, and best of luck. -
Very nicely done! Not sure it fits in with the pic but I like it!!
"When the sun flicks its light switch off
When the airs race out into infinity
It is then Tranquility is to be crowned King"
Loved this part!
thanks for entering
darlintlc
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Wow! This does give me someting to ponder and I will
My take on this it that it is a well crafted poem
plain spoeken and I like the tone of it. Good luck and I will go ponder lol.
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