The night washes
against the suns. The promise
boils with forces that seek
a catalyst to achieve
being. "What is " contests
the impermanance of "what
shall be." Time, irresistable,
mocks the immoveable object.
We do not see light.
Only the effect. It allows
us our seeing. Invisible,
light expresses itself
at the moment of touch.
The well spring of joy, love
draws us into being, where
we are enfused with creativity
knowing the infinite "now." Laughter
spills around the kudzu. Life provokes
our pretense of wisdom. Passion spurs
desire as I twist and turn, through
the ins and outs wrapped with green,
following the ache she creates in me.
Shadows cool my skin.
The filtered sunlight describes
laced creations, heiroglyphics.
Touching her.
Goose bumps swim beneath
the sweat. Laughter hushed,
kisses turn to purrs.
we puddle our warmth.
Stories traced in cells
sweat as the sun
falls from the sky. She
nibbles my ear, whispers
how she will express her joy,
cause my body to shed its strength.
We are the wonders of our world.
The moon sets the horizon afire,
steals our secrets, rises
against the darkness.
The night whorls tumble
against the love carrying echoes
to the stars. We shed
our discussions of time,
the past and future tumble
caught by the ineffable present.
Here
"we are"
connected.
Everything.
Feeling ourselves
celebrated by the universe,
the stars dance and weave
faces of forever fill the kudzu dreams.
This shell --
you and I --
disintegrates,
combusts,
explodes,
we circle
our centered
togetherness
filled with quantums of time.
The first star, we truly see,
holds our "all," the love we wish to be.
It lights the universe.
5:40 PM
May, 3, 2007
Alexandria, VA
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great luv de last staze
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This is about as transcendental as I get. Most of what I know is an experience I have yet to share.
Love, Tom B.
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excellent
Excellent job in writing this piece. The flow of the words helped create the picture in my mind. Very well done.
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Thanks for sharing how this touched you. Peace and Love, Tom B.
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Wow!!
Now this is a Journey to heighten the sense
and bring one in tune with self and partner
Love the Journey You take the reader's Spirit on,
allow the Mind to inhale the words...and the body
reacts accordingly!
Thank You for sharing this!!
Loved it!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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I wanted to dance the dance of creation, love and all the promises of touch stressing the spiritual. It is something we don't hear often. In fact I can barely think of one I have read. I am so please that this touched you the way you described. It means that I was able to include you in this larger dance. Thanks for sharing your joy with me.
Love, Tom B.
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HMMM, for some reason, unladylike as it is , "goosebumps swimming beneath sweat", ends up being the line I liked most. The style is different but works for this. You are very unique.
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I am just happy that it works for you.
Being unique? People comment that way. For me, I hear that can be very good or it can be very bad. Either way I, and I apologize for this, don't understand what is so unique about my voice. I would love for someone to explain. So, I ask you: what is so unique?
In the end all I can really say is, thank you for sharing what brought you joy. I am pleased that in some small way it touched you or moved you.
Love, Tom B.
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I loved the imagery in the 2nd stanza. This style of writing when done well (as you have!), fascinates me, because it's so foreign to my own.
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Truthfully, I don't know what my style is. I just try to reflect the feelings I have and let the vision speak for itself. Thanks for sharing the joy you found in this piece. I could ask for little more. Love, Tom B.
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i enjoyed every moment of it...very romantic and passionate
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Thank you. I wrote it with the hopes that the transcendental feelings that occur with touch and love would be recognized.
Love, Tom B.
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Surfed in...a good wave to catch
Softly spoken, I hear the voice of a mystic..many layers of vibratory energies present. Senses awakened, earth, sky, the All of the All..and a glimpse into the mystery. What else but share my favorites:
"We do not see light.
Only the effect. It allows
us our seeing. Invisible,
light expresses itself
at the moment of touch.
The well spring of joy, love
draws us into being, where
we are enfused with creativity
knowing the infinite "now" "
and:
This shell --
you and I --
disintegrates,
combusts,
explodes,
we circle
our centered
togetherness
filled with quantums of time.
Brilliant..
surfs up,
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your opening words express well what I was trying to achieve. When we, humans, touch so much happens at so many levels. When we are available, the results fundamentally shift our paradigmn and open us to a new experience of life. Thanks so much for sharing your joy and insights.
Love, Tom B.
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You will forever be the romantic
poet...Now, if we could only get
the phone company to fall in love
with you Lane
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This was an experiment. It worked on a number of levels, but not quite as well as I wanted. I think I will have to play more with the phantasmogorical magical stuff to get the transcentdent into the romantic.
Always was a head case
Love, Tom B.
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I get halfway through this and forget where I am and what I am doing. When I finally come to, there is a fish in my pocket. How'd you do that? Three bunnies for this!
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Fish are dangerous. Too much mercury. Still, we only know where we are when we are there and that doesn't happen too often. Use it for bait, the fish and enjoy the soujorn like a boat on the gulf. Love, Tom B.
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Beautiful beyond words
Entered in a hurry to get to work and they didnt submit...
Only the effect. It allows
us our seeing. Invisible,
light expresses itself
at the moment of touch.
The well spring of joy, love
draws us into being, where
we are enfused with creativity
knowing the infinite "now."
Loved the living in the NOW that you refer to.
Very easy to miss the present and future dreams living in the past. Anxiety abounds in life, coping with it is the hardest part in veiw of tomorrows plans.
Eloquent as always
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That explains why you didn't use many
Love, Tom B.
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Love expressed as only your pen can, full of emotion and feeling, it explodes as the senses see everything that is expressed. Love, C
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I am suprised at the reach of this piece. It was supposed to be a just a simple revery of the joy of running through the kudzu with a loved one. I am still learning that the world likes to taste what I see. Love, Tom B.
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Wow, what an awesome piece this is, my friend! You wrote this in a beautiful, loving way and I like that very much All the best to you
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When we honor the spirit and express our joy the world dances with us. Love, Tom B.
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Terrific!
very nice overall a well turned set of phrases and some artistry in word choices, a high level of skill evident here.
In the way of critique, some small points:
Mock: time mocked then life mocked; laughed might have done well for one;
the immoveable object mocked by time- bit of logic there i don't follow; immoveable seems to require the cooperation of time?
The first line "night washes against the suns" and the catalyst thought- these are great poetic phrases and well placed to capture attention but they don't click, word missing? puntuation?. For my taste it was a bit long but that is my subjectivity.
I think you are a gifted writer reflecting sophistication and a unique style...I enjoyed...PK
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thanks for all your kind words, but most of all for the questions and thoughts. Time is the irresistable force that makes the immovable object and oxymoron or nonsense. I didn't realize that I used mocked twice. Thanks I will have to think upon this.
I was trying to play with physics and philosophical ideas. Space, time and being are always entangled for me. As Nicamor Parra says in "Letters from a poet asleep in his chair"
"Scienctist say that time does not exisit
space does not exisit, but
death is "fait accompli"
Love, Tom B.
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Feeling ourselves
celebrated by the universe,
the stars dance and weave
faces of forever fill the kudzu dreams" FANATASTIC WRITE Tom!!! The beauty of the stars have always been a excitement to me.This is wonderful with excellent imagery to show us the light.
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Glad this gave you a lift. This was a dance with the heavens and finding heaven in a set arms attached to a beautiful heart. Your friend, Love, Tom B.
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Wow! The emotion in this write blows me away, You are winner this write. One of the best writes that I have seen here for awhile,
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Thanks for all the accolades. This is a rare one. I wrote it about the title. Normally I write my pieces and then create titles. Thanks again. Tom B.
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Oh Tom, I have no words, am speechless, breathless and bathed in awesome splendor as these words float thru my body and soul~~~~~
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Thanks. Just an evening besides the River.
Love, Tom B.
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