Shining in great beauty
Sits this lovely home alone
Surrounded by some flowers
Softly flowing long rivers
Serenely lifting is fog
Separating as it lifts
Sliding into the sky
Author notes
This beautiful painting reminds me of a Shangri-La. I'm not good on syllables.
A contest entry
- Pleiades Picture Competition V by ShelleyA.
525 points, ended May 19, 2007, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Good title. A nice attempt at this form. Nice imagery and tone. Nice expression of feeling. Nice alliteration. Please see rule 1 of the contest. Each line should be 6 syllables in length. Your poem fits the picture for which it was written. Thank you for your entry. Shelley
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This is a lovely piece of poetry. I think your syllable count is off a bit, so be sure to check it before she judges. I wish you the best in the contest.
Sam
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