look past
look deep
into my soul
theres a giant hole
left by hate
destined by fate
to be eternally there
with its blinding stare
holding in its arms
my dreams
my fears
my realities
it crushes them
with my rage
just another page
in this neverending story
called life...
Author notes
just tell me what you think, um i think its my best so far, but that doesnt mean you cant be brutally honest.
A contest entry
- Please, I want your best! by Cat10.
850 points, ended May 3, 2008, 62 entries
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850 points, ended May 8, 2008, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - - Go for the Gold X - (Pre-Writes...That's Right) by Desire.
700 points, ended June 2, 2008, 3 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Oh My~
Wonderful piece You have versed but unfortunately this contest calls for pre-writes from my previous contests entered but I Thank You for taking the time
Best wishes in all You do
and much love~ Desire~*~
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this is nice.. but um cna u tell me how it fits the promt ..or i'll have to DQ it
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Yes, I enjoyed this. Good job and good luck.
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hello
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I like it
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love this it flow sooo great and the rythm is amazing u are truly a great writer!
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thanks.
like u say in ur author info. its the exact same for me i sat dow and started to write and within ten minutes that was out and on paper.
thanks for the comment.
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very dark and very painfull. Yet I'm glad you confide in poetry.
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thanks for entering! I really, really like this piece! you did an amamzing job! the flow, the rhymes,great!! this is a great poem! good luck in this and all of your other poems!
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To tell you the truth, The piece of poetry I consider my best, is one exactly like this one. It has a different tone but same topic exactly. This is excelent in presentation. I like the background and colors used it also adds to your piece. Great job. Good Luck ~peace
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This is a very imaginative and wonderful poem. You have penned a beautiful piece for sure. Ifound the metaphors interesting as well.
it crushes them
with my rage
just another page
in this neverending story
called life...
This is a very powerful ending..great work -
"just another page
in this neverending story"
I like how you with those lines define life. The simplicity is great in this and the rhyming makes it sadder. Very nice! -
I need you to give me the option number you chose. I can only give you 1 day before I will be forced to DQ you. Sorry and good luck!
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Yay!
I really like this one. It made me smile for some reason...I have no idea why -
AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!
hey man that is pretty fricken good, I'm suprised that came out of you, it prolly just started comeing to you and you just let it come out, right, I'm telling you that's how I write some of my best stuff, it just starts comeing and I let it flow, and yeah this is definetly one of you best, it's my favorite.
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oh. I love the last line and last stanza. wonderful. it has a great idea to it. the only part I found a little awkward we the beginning.
But good job none the less.
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